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Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting. v.1

Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting. v. 1
Some people are of the opinion that in order to know about other nations, it is necessary to travel. However, I believe that people can learn about other nations by watching television and using the internet. On the one hand, some people argue that travelling is the best way to learn more about other nations. They think that without travelling it is not possible to learn much about the cultures, traditions and even languages of other nations. For instance, in their opinion, travelling allows us to interact with local people and know what they like and dislike. In addition, they believe that travelling is a great way to practise a language with its native speakers. This will significantly improve the ability to speak other languages. So, in these people’s opinion, the best way to learn about other nations is to travel. On the other hand, there are people who insist that we can get all the information we need about other countries online and on television. I strongly agree with them. There are many websites that contain everything about every country on this planet. Information about foods, cultures, traditions, languages and weather can be found on websites such as Wikipedia and YouTube. It is also possible to meet different people from other countries online and befriend them. For example, I personally have friends from different countries around the world whom I have met online. As a result, I have sufficient information about their countries without setting my foot on their lands. This clearly shows that people can learn about other nations without physically travelling to them. To sum up, although travelling is a great way of learning about other countries, I firmly insist that all information about other nations can be obtained through television and online.
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The limits of my language are the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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