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Many people nowadays work from home and this has been possible mainly because of the advancement of computer and internet technology. v.1

Many people nowadays work from home and this has been possible mainly because of the advancement of computer and internet technology. v. 1
It is a fact that many employees insist their employees to work from home these days and this is due to the fact that advancement in technology has made is possible for many employees, especially related to IT and communication sectors, to work from anyplace. The work culture has been drastically changed from last decades. People can work from any avenue and at any time. Let’s discuss the effects on this trend in detail. Firstly, the advancement of technology has made it possible for most of the people to work from different parts of the globe. An unavoidable fact is that the percentage of people working from home has been drastically increased in recent days. These factors affect positively for collaborating the resources all the time. Moreover, the efforts of work will not be diversified due to lack of resource availability. The most important feature of advancement in technology is collaboration, this is seen as one way of collaboration the resources. In addition to the above fact, the people can easily attend meetings and respond to the calls or assist team members, if any major issue's encountered in the system. Most likely, people tend to work more productively without the intervention of human or environmental barriers. In fact, the workload can be planned properly and can report to the respective teams for the deliverable. Nowadays people cannot relax as the fact they work from home, it can trace easily by many advanced tools which track the status of people's availability. The most observed fact is that many women can utilise their talent and skill in workplaces as the work from home allows them to work in a company. Perhaps the negative aspects of the above work culture should also be considered. There is a famous saying "for every action there will be an equal and opposite reaction". All the above facts are only applicable if the employee works and utilises the timely effort in a reasonable way. People working from home could easily divert their concentration on other things. Most often individual can involve in implementing own or personal stuff than official work. The deliverable can affect if an individual is non-responsive. Some technical issues can encounter like networking, connectivity to the workstation and the slow responsiveness. In conclusion, the work culture has been scaled to the flexibility of each individual, if the facility is utilised in a correct way, the outcome will be more effective to individual and to the organisation. Perhaps if there is any deviation then the productivity will be lowered. It depends on the fact of each individual's ethics and the responsibility. This culture is useful in various ways, the percentage of working people has increased and many women genders are able to contribute to the society.
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employees
insist their
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employees
to
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work
from home these days and this is due to the
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fact
that advancement in technology has made is possible for
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many
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employees
,
especially
related to IT and communication sectors, to
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work
from anyplace. The
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work
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culture
has been
drastically
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changed
from last decades.
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People
can
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work
from any avenue and at any time.
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Let
’s discuss the effects on this trend in detail.

Firstly
, the advancement of technology has made it possible for most of the
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people
to
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work
from
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different
parts of the globe. An unavoidable
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fact
is that the percentage of
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people
working from home has been
drastically
increased in recent days. These factors affect
positively
for collaborating the resources all the time.
Moreover
, the efforts of
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work
will not
be diversified
due to lack of resource availability. The most
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important
feature of advancement in technology is collaboration, this is
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seen
as one way of collaboration the resources.

In addition
to the above
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fact
, the
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people
can
easily
attend meetings and respond to the calls or assist team members, if any major issue's encountered in the system. Most likely,
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people
tend to
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work
more
productively
without the intervention of human or environmental barriers. In
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fact
, the workload can
be planned
properly
and can report to the respective teams for the deliverable. Nowadays
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people
cannot relax as the
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fact
they
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work
from home, it can trace
easily
by
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many
advanced tools which
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track
the status of
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people
's availability. The most observed
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fact
is that
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many
women can
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utilise
their talent and
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skill
in workplaces as the
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work
from home
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allows
them to
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work
in a
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company
.

Perhaps the
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negative
aspects of the above
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work
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culture
should
also
be considered
. There is a
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famous
saying
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"
for every action there will be an equal and opposite reaction
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"
. All the above facts are
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only
applicable if the
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employee
works and
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utilises
the timely effort
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in a reasonable way
.
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People
working from home could
easily
divert their concentration on other things. Most
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often
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individual
can involve in implementing
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own
or personal stuff than official
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work
. The deliverable can affect if an
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individual
is non-responsive.
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Some
technical issues can encounter like networking, connectivity to the workstation and the slow responsiveness.

In conclusion
, the
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work
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culture
has
been scaled
to the flexibility of each
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individual
, if the facility is
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utilised
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in a correct way
, the outcome will be more effective to
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individual
and to the
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organisation
. Perhaps if there is any deviation then the productivity will
be lowered
. It depends on the
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fact
of each individual's ethics and the responsibility. This
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culture
is useful in various ways, the percentage of working
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people
has increased and
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many
women genders are able to contribute to the society.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people nowadays work from home and this has been possible mainly because of the advancement of computer and internet technology. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
461 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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