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Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.4

Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 4
Animals have become an inevitable part of human’s life either in direct or indirect way. Pets have been considered as family members by many. This type of relation has both pros and cons, which I intend to discuss in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, not only pets are good companion of humans, but also considered as a stress buster. Indeed, in this hectic era where most of the family members are busy in their work and hardly have time to spend with other family members, then having pets aids individuals to surmount that ambience as an individual could feel the presence of someone who is caring and adorable. Not only this, dog is considered as the most loyal companion to his master in every circumstance, even in the problematic situation and he tries to protect his master from danger. However, there are some intricacies owing to have a family like relation with animals. Firstly, having connections with animals is not hygienic as it may prove hazardous to human health. To cite an example, if cleanliness is not maintained, it would lead to many diseases such as throat allergy, skin allergy, a stomach infection and many more. Moreover, treating animals as a part of the family would decrease interaction with other family members, thereby weakening the bond among family members. To conclude, although having a good relationship with animals has both pros and cons, yet in my opinion, it is more prominent to have a good connection with them in terms of considering them as good companions, stress buster and loyal.
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have become an inevitable part of human’s life either in direct or indirect way. Pets have
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. This type of relation has both pros and cons, which I intend to discuss in the subsequent paragraphs.

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with, not
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pets are
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companion of humans,
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considered as a
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stress
buster.
Indeed
, in this hectic era where most of the
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family
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members
are busy in their work and hardly have time to spend with other
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family
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members
, then having pets aids individuals to surmount that ambience as an individual could feel the presence of someone who is caring and adorable. Not
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this, dog
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as the most loyal companion to his master in every circumstance, even in the problematic
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situation and
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danger
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However
, there are
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intricacies owing to have a
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like relation with
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animals
.
Firstly
, having connections with
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animals
is not hygienic as it may prove hazardous to human health. To cite an example, if cleanliness is not maintained, it would lead to
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many
diseases such as throat allergy, skin allergy, a stomach infection and
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many
more.
Moreover
, treating
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animals
as a part of the
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family
would decrease interaction with other
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family
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members
, thereby weakening the bond among
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family
members.

To conclude
, although having a
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good
relationship with
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animals
has both pros and cons,
yet
in my opinion, it is more prominent to have a
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good
connection with them in terms of considering them as
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good
companions,
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stress
buster and loyal.
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IELTS essay Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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