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Too much emphasis is placed on testing this days, the need to prepare for test and examination is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Too much emphasis is placed on testing this days, the need to prepare for test and examination is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. v. 1
Education is not just going to the school or a university and getting a degree. In the recent era, institutes are over focussed on tests, which leads to stress in the children as well as the educators who are always busy preparing and conducting the exam. In this essay, I advocate my agreement with this statement. Firstly, the academies nowadays are putting unnecessary pressure on the children by subjecting them to frequent tests every now and then. Secondly, they include more syllabus which is almost a burden on the child's mind. Then, children are left with less time to properly understand the concept and as a result are more prone to cramming. For Instance, in a recent survey, conducted by the Delhi Education Department, it is observed that a growing number of failed students every year in Delhi is because of the overpressure created by the schools. Furthermore, the educators are also under the constant pressure created by institute authorities. They are forced to complete the unrealistic curriculum within a stipulated amount of time, as a result, the guides nowadays are primarily focussing on completing the curricula rather than providing quality education to the children. Then, they are forced to do the preparation for the exam and conducting exam every alternative month which results in diseases like Depression. To conclude, although, tests are imperative to access the student's understanding of different course concepts, but, organising more tests within a short span of time can become a stress for both the coaches as well as students and government should make sure that academies should conduct a less number of tests and include less syllabus.
Education is not
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just
going to the school or a university and getting a degree. In the recent era, institutes are over focussed on
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tests
, which leads to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
in the
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children
as well
as the educators who are always busy preparing and conducting the exam. In this essay, I advocate my agreement with this statement.

Firstly
, the academies nowadays are putting unnecessary pressure on the
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children
by subjecting them to frequent
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tests
every
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now
and then.
Secondly
, they include more syllabus which is almost a burden on the child's mind. Then,
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children
are
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left
with less time to
properly
understand the concept and
as a result
are more prone to cramming.
For Instance
, in a recent survey, conducted by the Delhi Education Department, it
is observed
that a growing number of failed students every year in Delhi is
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because
of the
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overpressure
created by the schools.

Furthermore
, the educators are
also
under the constant pressure created by institute authorities. They
are forced
to complete the unrealistic curriculum within a stipulated amount of time,
as a result
, the guides nowadays are
primarily
focussing on completing the curricula
rather
than providing quality education to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. Then, they
are forced
to do the preparation for the exam and conducting exam every alternative month which results in diseases like Depression.

To conclude
, although,
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tests
are imperative to access the student's understanding of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
course concepts,
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but
,
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organising
more
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tests
within a short span of time can become a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
for both the coaches
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as well as
students and
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government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that academies should conduct a less number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tests
and include less syllabus.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Too much emphasis is placed on testing this days, the need to prepare for test and examination is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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