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Many people feel that students should learn from online materials while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Many people feel that students should learn from online materials while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. v. 1
Nowadays, some teachers encourage their students to use online study materials in their educational process. It is reasonable, because help to decrease number of books and notebooks which pupils bring to school daily. Other teachers, however, prefer printed materials in consideration of the fact, that they help students better remember the data, they learn. In my opinion, online materials quite better fit nowadays neediness. First of all, talking about paper-based materials, it should be mentioned their high helpful in handwriting memory. In a process of writing, person can better remember data that he studies. The visual memory also works better, while pupil looks at the piece of paper, which have defects and unique texture, instead of the monitor, where all papers will be the same. Finally, in a case of the internet connection problems, or just a computer breakage, students would not have a possibility to make a homework or classwork properly. At the same time, it should be taken into the consideration total amount of students. Using online materials instead of printed one can save millions of trees. Moreover, air, water, and earth pollution can be decreased in a case of rejecting of usage paper-making manufactories. As we talk about student, benefits of them are obvious – they do not need to handle a lot of books on the way to the school/college. In conclusion I want to underline that both approaches of teaching -with or without printed materials have their advantages. But in my mind, using online materials is environmentally friendly and can help students be healthier.
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teachers encourage their
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students
to
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use
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online
study
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materials
in their educational process. It is reasonable,
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because
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help
to decrease number of books and notebooks which pupils bring to school daily. Other teachers,
however
, prefer printed
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materials
in consideration of the fact, that they
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help
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students
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better
remember the data, they learn. In my opinion,
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online
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materials
quite
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better
fit nowadays neediness.

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First of all
, talking about paper-based
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materials
, it should
be mentioned
their high helpful in handwriting memory. In a process of writing, person can
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better
remember data that he studies. The visual memory
also
works
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better
, while pupil looks at the piece of paper, which have defects and unique texture,
instead
of the monitor, where all papers will be the same.
Finally
, in a case of the internet connection problems, or
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just
a computer breakage,
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students
would not have a possibility to
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make
a homework or classwork
properly
.

At the same time, it should
be taken
into the consideration total amount of
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students
. Using
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
instead
of printed one can save millions of trees.
Moreover
, air, water, and earth pollution can
be decreased
in a case of rejecting of usage paper-making
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manufactories
. As we talk about
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student
, benefits of them are obvious
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–
they do not need to handle
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a lot of
books on the way to the school/college.

In
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conclusion I
want to underline that both approaches of teaching -with or without printed
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materials
have their advantages.
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But
in my mind, using
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online
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materials
is
environmentally
friendly and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
be healthier.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people feel that students should learn from online materials while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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