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Many people buy products that they do not really need and replace old products with new ones unnecessarily. Why do people buy things they do not really need? Do you think is a good thing?

Many people buy products that they do not really need and replace old products with new ones unnecessarily. Why do people buy things they do not really need? Do you think is a good thing? pw82
In this day and age, people are increasingly purchasing more and more goods and changing their old items though they are still functioning, whilst some consumer societies lead people to not to be satisfied with what they have. There are several possible reasons behind this statement. This essay totally agrees with this phenomenon due to some main reasons and its unavoidable impacts on the society. To begin with, this unwise action occurs because of some reasons; especially, because of utilization habits, which is considered as the main reason. First and foremost, some people are rich and want to show off their wealth by all means, which inevitably leads them to be unsatisfied with their belongings. They are competing with others to prove who is richer and more successful. In China, for example, the period of a having mobile phone for an individual is around 1 or 3 years, which is actually a very short time. They are obsessed with buying a new brand. Partial reason to this circumstance is that generally Chinese think that the older version of what they have is already obsolete. Also, some Middle East countries have some wealthy people who are used to purchasing things with exorbitant prices, which they might never use in their lives. They mostly do this just because a friend or colleague of them have already bought the items. Thusly, it is not difficult to come to the conclusion that following the trend of consumption or feeling unsatisfied for most people in the society are caused by consumption frenzy. I personally do not approve of this curiosity. The tendency of replacing old products with new ones has some main negative impacts on the people and on their community. Spending money on unwanted things can urge people to be in debt and poverty. It has been observed that social media plays a major role in spreading information across the society, by which some of the ignorant people are influenced very easily. For instance, people are prone to change their clothes or cars as soon as there is a launch of a new trend and models in the market instead of shopping for their daily needs. Also, buying unnecessary things prompt to waste products, which in turn causes fresh water reserves, fish stocks and forests to get dirty and many species get under the threat of extinction. Therefore, unfortunatly, people do not recognize the severe impacts of overconsumption on the their budget and environment. To sum up everything that has been stated so far, it is clear that purchasing useless things to show off the wealth and influential media are the key factors that contribute to the meanless trend of replacing old items with the new ones and in light of the effects of overconsumption on the people's economy and environment, some serious maesures need to be urgently taken if we are to save our world.
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people
are
increasingly
purchasing more and more
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goods
and changing their
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old
items though they are
still
functioning, whilst
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some
consumer societies lead
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people
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to not to
be satisfied
with what they have. There are several possible
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reasons
behind this statement. This essay
totally
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agrees
with this phenomenon due to
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some
main
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reasons
and its unavoidable impacts on the society.

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begin
with, this unwise action occurs
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of
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some
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reasons
;
especially
,
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of utilization habits, which
is considered
as the main
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reason
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and foremost,
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some
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people
are rich and want to
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show
off their wealth by all means, which
inevitably
leads them to
be unsatisfied
with their belongings. They are competing with others to prove who is richer and more successful. In China,
for example
, the period of a having mobile phone for an individual is around 1 or 3 years, which is actually a
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very
short time. They
are obsessed
with buying a
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new
brand. Partial
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reason
to this circumstance is that
generally
Chinese
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think
that the older version of what they have is already obsolete.
Also
,
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some
Middle East countries have
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some
wealthy
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people
who are
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used
to purchasing things with exorbitant prices, which they might never
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use
in their
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lives
. They
mostly
do this
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just
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because
a friend or colleague of them have already
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the items.
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, it is not difficult to
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come
to the conclusion that following the trend of consumption or feeling unsatisfied for most
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people
in the society
are caused
by consumption frenzy.

I
personally
do not approve of this curiosity. The tendency of replacing
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old
products with
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new
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ones
has
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some
main
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negative
impacts on the
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people
and on their community. Spending money on unwanted things can urge
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people
to be in debt and poverty. It has
been observed
that social media plays a major role in spreading information across the society, by which
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some of the
ignorant
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people
are influenced
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very
easily
.
For instance
,
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people
are prone to
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change
their clothes or cars as
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soon
as there is a launch of a
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new
trend and models in the market
instead
of shopping for their daily needs.
Also
, buying unnecessary things prompt to waste products, which in turn causes fresh water reserves, fish stocks and forests to
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get
dirty and
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many
species
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get
under the threat of extinction.
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,
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unfortunatly
,
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people
do not recognize the severe impacts of overconsumption on
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the their budget
and environment.

To sum up everything that has
been stated
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so
far, it is
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clear
that purchasing useless things to
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show
off the wealth and influential media are the key factors that contribute to the
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meanless
trend of replacing
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old
items with the
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new
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ones
and in light of the effects of overconsumption on the
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people
's economy and environment,
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some
serious
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maesures
need to be
urgently
taken if we are to save our world.
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IELTS essay Many people buy products that they do not really need and replace old products with new ones unnecessarily. Why do people buy things they do not really need? Do you think is a good thing?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
482 words
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