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Many people belive that women makes better parents than men and that is why they have a greater role in rasing children in most societies. Other claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. How far do you agree to the statement? state examples and reasons to support your answer.

Many people belive that women makes better parents than men and that is why they have a greater role in rasing children in most societies. Other claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. How far state examples and reasons to support your answer. j2Vy
Through the traditional belief is that it is the duty of the women to take care children, generation roles have been changed in the present paradigm shift. Others argue that men are also equally good at parenting. Therefore, I agree that both men and women have equal responsibities at parenting. First and Foremost, why women is good at parenting because women had a bound with the child at the time of conception. To illustrate this, women bear a child in her womb for 10 months. Indeed, Lactation had been evolved intimacy between the mother and a child. Secondly, womens have a tolerance nature. In fact, they show Love, Care and bestow happiness to their children. Moreover, children are quite sensitive and emotion, with the less aggressive nature of women they might feel pleasure with their mothers than fathers. Hence, conventionally People believe that women have a greater role in raising children then men in most societies. Thirdly, womens are unique. There are few women who are more aggressive and irresponsible cause injury and sometimes leads to death of a child. Thus, such scenario the roles taken by the father and love their children and make sensible adults. Furthermore, in contemporary world both the spouses were working. So, the responsibility of taking care of child is distributed equally among them. Besides, children need unconditional love, affection and understanding from their parents. For example, some childrens makes their role morden as father. They follow the foot steps of him and achieve success in life. In a nutshell, in the past primary responsibility takes place on women. In modern world women and men have homogeneous role at parenting. Further, children feel bliss and helpful to evolve their physical and Intilectual skills. Consequently, society can also gain fruitful and dutiful citizens.
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to take care
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, generation
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have been
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changed
in the present paradigm shift. Others argue that
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men
are
also
equally
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good
at parenting.
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agree
that both
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men
and
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women
have equal
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responsibities
at parenting.

First
and Foremost, why
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women
is
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good
at parenting
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because
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women
had a bound with the
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child
at the time of conception. To illustrate this,
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women
bear a
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child
in her womb for 10 months.
Indeed
, Lactation had
been evolved
intimacy between the mother and a child.

Secondly
,
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womens have
a tolerance nature. In fact, they
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show
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Love
, Care and bestow happiness to their
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children
.
Moreover
,
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children
are quite sensitive and emotion, with the less aggressive nature of
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women
they might feel pleasure with their mothers than fathers.
Hence
,
conventionally
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believe that
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women
have a greater
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role
in raising
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children
then
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men
in most societies.

Thirdly
,
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womens
are unique. There are few
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women
who are more aggressive and irresponsible cause injury and
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sometimes
leads to death of a
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child
.
Thus
, such scenario the
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roles
taken by the father and
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love
their
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children
and
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make
sensible adults.
Furthermore
, in contemporary world both the spouses were working.
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So
, the responsibility of taking care of
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child
is distributed
equally
among them.
Besides
,
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children
need unconditional
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love
, affection and understanding from their parents.
For example
,
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some
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childrens
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makes
their
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role
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morden
as father. They follow the foot steps of him and achieve success in life.

In a nutshell, in the past primary responsibility takes place on
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women
. In modern world
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women
and
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men
have homogeneous
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role
at parenting.
Further
,
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children
feel bliss and helpful to evolve their physical and
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Intilectual
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skills
.
Consequently
, society can
also
gain fruitful and dutiful citizens.
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IELTS essay Many people belive that women makes better parents than men and that is why they have a greater role in rasing children in most societies. Other claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. How far state examples and reasons to support your answer.

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