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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

When the conscious of protection of the nature had been increase, the meaning of the animal protection has take into account. The all we could know is that how to use proper ways to cover the possible solution to process the whole. As a result, the tactics always be judged by most of the public and Government. The Zoo had been cover lots of different elements which could affect animal life, even citizens daily life. However, the well-being of the animals should be concern when the zoo has been cover by the detection of conservative people who believe that the all species has right to live on the earth. Knowing is totally different from handling the truth. In fact, public always do not concerning the other animals life once they do not want to discover the influence by whole ecosystem.
When the conscious of protection of the nature had been increase, the meaning of the
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animal
protection has
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take
into account. The all we could know is that how to
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use
proper ways to cover the possible solution to process the whole.
As a result
, the tactics always
be judged
by most of the public and
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Government
. The Zoo had been cover lots of
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different
elements which could affect
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animal
life, even citizens daily life.
However
, the well-being of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
should be concern when the zoo has been cover by the detection of conservative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who believe that the all species has right to
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live
on the earth. Knowing is
totally
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different
from handling the truth. In fact, public always do not
After the auxiliary verb ‘do’, use the base form of a verb. Did you mean “concern”?
concerning
the other
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animals
life once they do not want to discover the influence by whole ecosystem.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
140 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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