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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

Nowadays, it is often believed that zoos are meaningless to our society and they has been questioned whether they provide benefits to people and animals, or should be closed. This essay will examine the possible problems and suggest some solutions. To begin with, there are some serious and negative issues with zoos. First and foremost, it is obvious that capturing animals in cages, which is done to profit from visitors, is inhumane and brutal. Furthermore, animals tend to have a brief longevity when they are in custody. For instance, an elephant is supposed to live an average of 56 years while those who are kept in zoos live an average of approximately 17 years. Many people believe that interfering with nature untrue and animals have the right to spend their life in wildlife. In terms of measures, there are a few options which could be taken. Wildlife sanctuaries are highly advocated because they would bring a favourable living condition and protections to wild animals. Moreover, the government should invest much more in these places as they would require a tremendous amount of money. To illustrate, it is imperative to have a myriad of staffs who monitor and support a variety of animals. Here, people would have the chance to observe them eating and living freely in their own habitat. In conclusion, it is inevitable that wildlife sanctuaries are the most reasonable solution and zoos are not the only way for human to see and learn about wild animals.
Nowadays, it is
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believed that zoos are meaningless to our
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society and
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been questioned
whether they provide benefits to
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people
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animals
, or should
be closed
. This essay will examine the possible problems and suggest
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some
solutions.

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with, there are
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serious and
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issues with zoos.
First
and foremost, it is obvious that capturing
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animals
in cages, which
is done
to profit from visitors, is inhumane and brutal.
Furthermore
,
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animals
tend to have a brief longevity when they are in custody.
For instance
, an elephant
is supposed
to
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live
an average of 56 years while those who are
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kept
in zoos
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live
an average of approximately 17 years.
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people
believe that interfering with nature untrue and
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animals
have the right to spend their life in wildlife.

In terms of measures, there are a few options which could
be taken
. Wildlife sanctuaries are
highly
advocated
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they would bring a
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favourable
living condition and protections to wild
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animals
.
Moreover
, the
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government
should invest much more in these places as they would require a tremendous amount of money. To illustrate, it is imperative to have a myriad of staffs who monitor and support a variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
. Here,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would have the chance to observe them eating and living
freely
in their
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own
habitat.

In conclusion
, it is inevitable that wildlife sanctuaries are the most reasonable solution and zoos are not the
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only
way for human to
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see
and learn about wild
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animals
.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

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248 words
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