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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed? 0DNQ
Zoos are one of the places where children learn the world of Animal Kingdom. But, nowadays some people think that zoos have no reason to exist. Despite of the benefits that zoo can bring, it brings more drawbacks like destroying ecosystem and animal exploitation. This essay will discuss the drawbacks of zoos and what can be the substitute if they are closed. Firstly, Animals are naturally found in the wild but since they become captive in a small establishment for entertainment or education purposes, they become dependent on humans for giving them food, thus destroying the balance of the ecosystem. For example these wild animals like lions and tigers are born to be predators. They hunt for their own food and removing vulnerable preys like the old, injured and sick. It will make them control the size of prey population thus, maintaining healthy and balance ecosystem. Another disadvantage of zoo is that they struggle to make profits, making the welfare of the animals poor. If the company does not have enough income, they will have a hard time to sustain the needs of the animals like food and shelter. It takes great money to maintain animals in good physical environment. Since some zoos are having a hard time to support the daily expenses for their operation, it may be a reason for the closure of the business. These facilities are tool for the learning of the students for the animal world. If the zoos will be closed, Government should make another way on how these children will learn. They can open a 3D museum where no animals will be held captive and it will not destroy the ecosystem. It is also better if Government will maintain the natural habitat of these animals and will make safari. In this case animals can run free and still can live with their natural behaviors. Zoos still exist and the problems involving them still continue. These animals need to be taken care of directly or indirectly. People should protect the nature and give these animals the right to live free in the wild where they belong.
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exploitation. This essay will discuss the drawbacks of zoos and what can be the substitute if they
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Firstly
,
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Animals
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found in the wild
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but
since they become captive in a
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small
establishment for entertainment or education purposes, they become dependent on humans for giving them food,
thus
destroying the balance of the ecosystem.
For example
these wild
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animals
like lions and tigers
are born
to be predators. They hunt for their
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own
food and removing vulnerable preys like the
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old
, injured and sick. It will
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make
them control the size of prey population
thus
, maintaining healthy and balance ecosystem. Another disadvantage of zoo is that they struggle to
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make
profits, making the welfare of the
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animals
poor. If the
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company
does not have
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enough
income, they will have a
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hard
time to sustain the needs of the
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animals
like food and shelter. It takes great money to maintain
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animals
in
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good
physical environment.

Since
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zoos are having a
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hard
time to support the daily expenses for their operation, it may be a reason for the closure of the business. These facilities are tool for the learning of the students for the
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animal
world. If the zoos will
be closed
,
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Government
should
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make
another way on how these children will learn. They can open a 3D museum where no
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animals
will
be held
captive and it will not
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destroy
the ecosystem. It is
also
better if
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Government
will maintain the natural habitat of these
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animals
and will
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make
safari.
In this case
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animals
can run free and
still
can
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live
with their natural behaviors.

Zoos
still
exist and the problems involving them
still
continue. These
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need to
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care of
directly
or
indirectly
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People
should protect the nature and give these
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animals
the right to
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live
free in the wild where they belong.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

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