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Many people believe that teachers should teach students how to judge right from wrong and how to behave, while others think they should just teach academic subjects. What is your opinion? v.1

Many people believe that teachers should teach students how to judge right from wrong and how to behave, while others think they should just teach academic subjects. What is your opinion? v. 1
Whether teachers are responsible to let school learners know what is correct and not correct, it's not a new topic. Some people think that it isn't a normal task of the teachers except academic contents. In my point of view, teachers should teach the students in order to help them to improve in every way possible. Firstly, some people think that teachers are responsible for teaching what is correct and incorrect because it might assist the learner to identify what should they behave in the society. For example, if a child does not know anything when they are working in the society, it would not help them to solve the problem. They might just continue with the false concept. Possibly this will lead to a conclusion that everyone working in their own way. If this exists in Hong Kong, there will be a huge argument every day non-stop as people think that their own idea is correct, but actually not. However, some people believe that teachers should only teach things that are related to the school syllabus. It is because they think that the parents will teach their own child at home. They will tell the kids what should they do and it is parents’ responsibilities to guide their own child. Also, some parents think that teachers might teach bad things to their kids. For example, there are some teachers at the University of Hong Kong telling the students to occupy Central. This is extremely unacceptable. Due to this, parents only required the teachers to teach school-related stuff. In my opinion, I agree with teachers only teaching school-based staff would be a better option because for me personally, I do not listen to the teachers at all, I know that my parents will teach me how to behave and what I should do. For example, some teachers told me that I am doing something wrong, but still, I do not want to listen to them. As their words aren’t influential at all, it won’t make any impact on me. To conclude, I think teachers should only focus on academic studies instead of teaching the learner about righteous and wrongness. Our parents will be responsible for that.
Whether
teachers
are responsible to
let
school learners know what is
correct
and not
correct
, it's not a new topic.
Some
people
think
that it isn't a normal task of the
teachers
except academic contents. In my point of view,
teachers
should
teach
the students in order to
help
them to
improve
in every way possible.

Firstly
,
some
people
think
that
teachers
are responsible for teaching what is
correct
and incorrect
because
it might assist the learner to identify what should they behave in the society.
For example
, if a child does not know anything when they are working in the society, it would not
help
them to solve the problem. They might
just
continue with the false concept.
Possibly
this will lead to a conclusion that everyone working in their
own
way. If this exists in Hong Kong, there will be a huge argument every day non-
stop
as
people
think
that their
own
idea
is
correct
,
but
actually not.

However
,
some
people
believe that
teachers
should
only
teach
things that
are related
to the school syllabus. It is
because
they
think
that the
parents
will
teach
their
own
child at home. They will
tell
the kids what should they do and it is
parents’
responsibilities to guide their
own
child.
Also
,
some
parents
think
that
teachers
might
teach
bad
things to their kids.
For example
, there are
some
teachers
at the University of Hong Kong telling the students to occupy Central. This is
extremely
unacceptable. Due to this,
parents
only
required the
teachers
to
teach
school-related stuff.

In my opinion, I
agree
with
teachers
only
teaching school-based staff would be a better option
because
for me
personally
, I do not listen to the
teachers
at all, I know that my
parents
will
teach
me how to behave and what I should do.
For example
,
some
teachers
told
me that I am doing something
wrong
,
but
still
, I do not want to listen to them. As their words
aren’t
influential at all, it
won’t
make
any impact on me.

To conclude
, I
think
teachers
should
only
focus on academic studies
instead
of teaching the learner about righteous and wrongness. Our
parents
will be responsible for that.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that teachers should teach students how to judge right from wrong and how to behave, while others think they should just teach academic subjects. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
366 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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