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Many people believe that social netwroking sites such as facebook, have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Most people believe that a worldwide car-free day is an important step towards minimizing air pollution, while others think that there may be alternates to this. In this essay I will discuss both the arguments and give examples to support my viewpoint. Firstly, I will explore how people will feel without a car for one day and secondly, I will give counter to reduce air pollution by other means. While having a day off for cars certainly reduces the amount of traffic, noise pollution, fossil fuel combustion and will help in reducing the air pollution, furthermore human beings will start to feel how thier ancestors used to live without a car and some older population will definitely feel nostalgia as it will make them remind the good old times when technological equipments was not a luxury. ' In addition to this, for atleast a day people may feel obligated to go to work or school using a cycle, which is a great exercise for lower body. Proponents of the above point of view may feel they are helping the world but opponents definitely think that there are effective ways to reduce air pollution that should be followed throught out the year, not only on a single day. E-cars and generation of energy using hydro, sonar or wind are better and efficient ways to get alternatives to fossil fuels. Moreover, big manufacturing firms combust greater amounts of fuels to generate products for daily use and these corporations do not consider the pollutants thrown in atmosphere for they are earning good profits. Most beneficial step companies have taken nowadays is that they have started using HFCs instead of CFCs which is a great alternate and does not affect air in devestating ways. Therefore in conclusion, any way to reduce air pollution is appreciable as the demand of clean air is increasing day by day. Although, in my opinion, making a single day change can never reduce air pollution which has been an issue for many years.
Most
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believe that a worldwide car-free day is an
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important
step towards minimizing
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air
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pollution
, while others
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think
that there may be alternates to this.

In this essay I will discuss both the arguments and give examples to support my viewpoint.

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, I will explore how
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people
will
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feel
without a car for one day and
secondly
, I will give counter to
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reduce
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air
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pollution
by other means.

While having a day off for cars
certainly
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reduces
the amount of traffic, noise
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pollution
, fossil fuel combustion and will
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help
in reducing the
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air
pollution,

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furthermore
human beings will
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start
to
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feel
how
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thier
ancestors
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used
to
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live
without a car and
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some
older population will definitely
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feel
nostalgia as it will
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make
them remind the
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good
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old
times when technological equipments was not a luxury. '

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a day
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people
may
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feel
obligated to go to work or school using a cycle, which is a great exercise for lower body.

Proponents of the above point of view may
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feel
they are helping the
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world
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but
opponents definitely
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think
that there are effective ways to
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reduce
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air
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pollution
that should
be followed
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throught out
the year, not
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only
on a single day.

E-cars and generation of energy using hydro, sonar or wind are better and efficient ways to
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get
alternatives to fossil fuels.
Moreover
,
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big
manufacturing firms combust greater amounts of fuels to generate products for daily
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use
and these corporations do not consider the pollutants thrown in atmosphere for they are earning
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good
profits.

Most beneficial step
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companies
have taken nowadays is that they have
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started
using
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HFCs
instead
of
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CFCs
which is a great alternate and does not affect
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air
in
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devestating
ways.

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Therefore
in conclusion
, any way to
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reduce
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air
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pollution
is appreciable as the demand of clean
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air
is increasing day by day. Although, in my opinion, making a single day
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change
can never
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reduce
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air
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pollution
which has been an issue for
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many
years.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that social netwroking sites such as facebook, have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
334 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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