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Why people have difficulty in getting enough sleep?

Sleep deprivation is one of the leading concerns nowadays. People from all age groups and gender are facing difficulties in getting enough sleep. Problems like stress and depression are one of the common reasons of lack of sleep. Living in this era where everything and everyone is so connected to each other through social media, Social media has been considered as one of the leading sources of depression, especially among the young generations. People need to change their eating habits and avoid negative energy that is impacting their sleeping habits. They need to consult a doctor and go through a general examination to verify if the symptom is not due to some underline disease.
Sleep deprivation is one of the leading concerns nowadays.
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from all age groups and gender are facing difficulties in getting
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sleep.

Problems like
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stress
and depression are one of the common reasons of lack of sleep. Living in this era where everything and everyone is
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connected to each other through social media, Social media has
been considered
as one of the leading sources of depression,
especially
among the young generations.

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People
need to
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change
their eating habits and avoid
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negative
energy
that is
impacting their sleeping habits. They need to consult a doctor and go through a general examination to verify if the symptom is not due to
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some
underline disease.

IELTS essay Why people have difficulty in getting enough sleep?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
114 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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