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Many people believe that social networking websites such as facebook and instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Many people believe that social networking websites such as facebook and instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. v. 1
In the modern world, social networking websites such as Facebook, Instagram, twitter has become an important aspect of our life. The main aim of these websites is to connect the people around the world with each other. Along with that, many people believe these websites are the great source marketing and they promote their product on Facebook. Despite the benefits, some people believe that Facebook, Instagram has a huge negative impact on the society. According to me, there are many negative impacts and this essay will discuss the same. Many people use social networking website to spread fake news and cause havoc on the environment. They cheat innocent people and steal their money. Our privacy is compromised when we create an account on Facebook. For instance, in 2018, there was a data breach in Facebook's server and lots of information about millions of people was publicly available. It was a serious issue as it could be used by terrorists. Even though they are the great source of entertainment, marketing, these websites are the main reason of most of the problems in India. Almost every Indian is active on Facebook and one single speech by a politician results in huge fights. They provoke people by using harsh words for other religions. Education is also affected by Facebook and Instagram. The students are focused on getting more and more likes on their posts on Facebook instead of their books. In conclusion, there are many advantages of social networking websites. They not only connect us with each other, but also provide many different ways to promote our products. As, every good thing has some bad factors too, we should not overreact after reading various posts on Facebook. We should always keep on thing in mind that everything that is written on Facebook or Instagram is not always the truth.
In the modern world, social networking websites such as Facebook, Instagram, twitter has become an
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important
aspect of our life. The main aim of these websites is to connect the
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people
around the world with each other. Along with that,
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many
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people
believe these websites are the great source
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marketing and
they promote their product on Facebook. Despite the benefits,
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some
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people
believe that Facebook, Instagram has a huge
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negative
impact on the society.
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According to me
, there are
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many
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negative
impacts and this essay will discuss the same.

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Many
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people
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use
social networking
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website
to spread fake news and cause havoc on the environment. They cheat innocent
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people
and steal their money. Our privacy
is compromised
when we create an account on Facebook.
For instance
, in 2018, there was a data breach in Facebook's server and lots of information about millions of
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people
was
publicly
available. It was a serious issue as it could be
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used
by terrorists.

Even though
they are the great source of entertainment, marketing, these websites are the main reason of most of the problems in India. Almost every Indian is active on Facebook and one single speech by a politician results in huge fights. They provoke
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people
by using harsh words for other religions. Education is
also
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affected
by Facebook and Instagram. The students
are focused
on getting more and more likes on their posts on Facebook
instead
of their books.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
advantages of social networking websites. They not
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only
connect us with each other,
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but
also
provide
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many
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different
ways to promote our products. As, every
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good
thing has
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some
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bad
factors too, we should not overreact after reading various posts on Facebook. We should always
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keep
on thing in mind that everything that
is written
on Facebook or Instagram is not always the truth.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking websites such as facebook and instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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