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many people believe that social networking such as facebook have had a huge negetive impact on both individuals and society. to what extent do you agree. v.1

many people believe that social networking such as facebook have had a huge negetive impact on both individuals and society. v. 1
The extensive usage of flights by travellers in recent times has increased significantly, however the demand for aviation industry is growing because of tourism and the increase in population. This essay will discuss the core reasons of this acute problem and provides some efficient solutions. One of the main causes of air pollution from the past decade is due to the emission of dangerous gases by the airlines. These planes emit harmful gases such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen while travelling on air. As a result, the ozone layer is depleting and showing adverse effects on the mother earth. For instance, the machine in the airplane which burns fuel and emits carbon dioxide to the environment and polluting the air. Another burning issue because of flights is that the noise pollution made by these are concerning the animals living around airports. Therefore, this complex issue, not only harmful to the environment, but also to the animals. In order to tackle this central problem, the government should lay huge taxes on air companies based on the emission levels. If these planes are emitting a tremendous amount of gases then they should be banned from flying. Another possible solution is by minimizing the travelling by planes and preferring by train or bus. In order to alleviate or reduce the noise pollution, one can install latest technology devices which reflects the sound. Therefore, these are the possible ways that we can save the mother nature. To conclude, the popularity of travelling by air is increasing for the past decade. This essay discussed how the demand of flights is negatively impacting on the environment such as air pollution and noise pollution. This essay also suggested the solutions to this by imposing taxes on air companies and to use technology to reduce sound pollution
The extensive usage of flights by
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travellers
in recent times has increased
significantly
,
however
the demand for aviation industry is growing
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because
of tourism and the increase in population. This essay will discuss the core reasons of this acute problem and provides
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some
efficient solutions.

One of the main causes of
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air
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pollution
from the past decade is due to the emission of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
gases by the airlines. These
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
planes
emit harmful gases such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen while travelling on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
.
As a result
, the ozone layer is depleting and showing adverse effects on the mother earth.
For instance
, the machine in the airplane which burns fuel and emits carbon dioxide to the environment and polluting the
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air
. Another burning issue
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because
of flights is that the noise
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pollution
made by these
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are concerning
the animals living around airports.
Therefore
, this complex issue, not
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only
harmful to the environment,
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but
also
to the animals.

In order to tackle this central problem, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should lay huge taxes on
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air
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
based on the emission levels. If these
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
planes
are emitting a tremendous amount of gases then they should
be banned
from flying. Another possible solution is by minimizing the travelling by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
planes
and preferring by train or bus. In order to alleviate or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the noise
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pollution
, one can install
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latest
technology devices which reflects the sound.
Therefore
, these are the possible ways that we can save the mother nature.

To conclude
, the popularity of travelling by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
is increasing for the past decade. This essay discussed how the demand of flights is
negatively
impacting on the environment such as
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air
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pollution
and noise
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pollution
. This essay
also
suggested the solutions to this by imposing taxes on
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air
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
technology to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
sound
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
pollution
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay many people believe that social networking such as facebook have had a huge negetive impact on both individuals and society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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