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MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT SOCIAL NETWORKING SITES (SUCH AS FACEBOOK) HAVE HAD A HUGE NEGATIVE IMPACT ON BOTH INDIVIDUALS AND SOCIETIES.

MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT SOCIAL NETWORKING SITES (SUCH AS FACEBOOK) HAVE HAD A HUGE NEGATIVE IMPACT ON BOTH INDIVIDUALS AND SOCIETIES. pRKMD
Social networking sites, for example, Facebook, are considered to harm individuals as well as societies. However, I believe that these sites are beneficial for people if they use it ethically. Social networking sites have several benefits such as it engages people by connecting with others all over the world, and allows oneself to share ideas with individuals having a common interest. Facebook updates us with the latest inventions, in fields, we are interested in. Thus, we can keep up with the latest trends using social networking sites. I agree with the idea that they have a bad impact on society. Moreover, this is because people are not using them in the right way. These sites are meant for connecting people but not getting engaged to that extent that you even lose contacts with your society, local communities. People nowadays talk to individuals living in some other end of the world, even though it does not guarantee that they would ever meet in the future. Youth especially get on the wrong track, which also creates a negative impact on their studies and work. People should take benefits from such social networking sites to gain their knowledge, to express their ideas and thoughts by sharing with people across the world. These sites even help you in choosing your interests, developing skills and getting more accurate in your field. If you are from the sales and marketing department, you can have lots of opportunities by exposing your products to the world, it’s the most useful way of marketing. Unfortunately, after having so many advantages, we never use them for good. People on their social media keep updating their stories, where they go, what they are doing. We get each hour updates on what our friends, colleagues are doing. That is now the biggest concern according to me, as it is purely related to our privacy. Also, social networking sites have a location tag, which is dangerous as if someone who doesn’t like you, or is jealous of you, can you that location and maybe attack you. Along with those people, mostly the youths, get in the trap of cyberbullying which often leads to depression and anxiety. So, I think that the main reason for having a bad impact on our society by social networking sites is us. We are the ones who are responsible for all these. Although social networking sites bring people closer all over the world, we certainly get apart from our local relations. Overall, individuals should stay and create a stronger connection with their local communities and society, and use social networking sites in a limited manner to keep a balance and maintain a healthy life.
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networking
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sites
,
for example
, Facebook,
are considered
to harm
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individuals
as well
as
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societies
.
However
, I believe that these
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sites
are beneficial for
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people
if they
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use
it
ethically
.

Social networking
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sites
have several benefits such as it engages
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people
by connecting with others all over the
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world
, and
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allows
oneself to share
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ideas
with
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individuals
having a common interest. Facebook updates us with the latest inventions, in fields, we
are interested
in.
Thus
, we can
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keep
up with the latest trends using
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social
networking
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sites
. I
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agree
with the
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idea
that they have a
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bad
impact on
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society
.
Moreover
, this is
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because
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people
are not using them in the right way. These
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sites
are meant
for connecting
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people
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but
not getting engaged to that extent that you even lose contacts with your
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society
, local communities.
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People
nowadays talk to
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individuals
living in
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some
other
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end
of the
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world
,
even though
it does not guarantee that they would ever
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meet
in the future. Youth
especially
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get
on the
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wrong
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track
, which
also
creates a
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negative
impact on their studies and work.

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People
should take benefits from such
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social
networking
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sites
to gain their knowledge, to express their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and thoughts by sharing with
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people
across the
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world
. These
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sites
even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you in choosing your interests, developing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and getting more accurate in your field. If you are from the sales and marketing department, you can have lots of opportunities by exposing your products to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
, it’s the most useful way of marketing. Unfortunately, after having
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so
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many
advantages, we never
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use
them for
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good
.
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People
on their
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social
media
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keep
updating their stories, where they go, what they are doing. We
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
each hour updates on what our friends, colleagues are doing.
That is
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now
the biggest concern according to me, as it is
purely
related to our privacy.
Also
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sites
have a location tag, which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
as if someone who doesn’t like you, or is jealous of you, can you that location and maybe attack you. Along with those
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people
,
mostly
the youths,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
in the trap of cyberbullying which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
leads to depression and anxiety.

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So
, I
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think
that the main reason for having a
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bad
impact on our
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society
by
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social
networking
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sites
is us. We are the ones who are responsible for all these. Although
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social
networking
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sites
bring
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people
closer all over the
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world
, we
certainly
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get
apart from our local relations.
Overall
,
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individuals
should stay and create a stronger connection with their local communities and
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society
, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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social
networking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sites
Consider replacing "in a limited manner" with the adverb for "limited"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a limited manner
to
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keep
a balance and maintain a healthy life.
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IELTS essay MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT SOCIAL NETWORKING SITES (SUCH AS FACEBOOK) HAVE HAD A HUGE NEGATIVE IMPACT ON BOTH INDIVIDUALS AND SOCIETIES.

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6.0
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