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is it good that we search for new source of fossil fuels?

is it good that we search for new source of fossil fuels? Jow55
Need for fossil fuels is mounting and limitation in amount of our energy resources, made us to excavate in intact areas such as poles and oceans. In my view, we should not dig our globe remote areas to address our perpetual need for energy. It is obvious that any transition in our source of energy require a lot of expenditures and often less advantage countries cannot be faced with this astronomical prices. Moreover, sometimes developing nations are not capable to shift towards new sources of energy due to technological obstacles. But often the cost of seeking for new source of fossil fuels is much more lessen than replacing all energy consumer things such as cars, industries etc. especially in short term. And finally some countries prefer to use their existence sources till they achieve advanced technology to can be replaced the old one. On the other hand, fossil fuels are not lasting forever and are limited, so definitely they are going to be finished within next decades. so it is intellectual opt that we consider on new, green and renewable source of energy instead of devastating our globe intact places such as poles for seeking fossil fuels. Moreover these kind of energy are so pollutant and have been ruined our environment and even lead to increase some dangerous disease such as skin and lung cancer. Furthermore in long-run the cost of green and renewable source of energy will be lessen in comparison to the current sources. And developed countries which are leading in this way should be considered as shining role models for other societies. In conclusion I reaffirm my position that we must not devastated our environment for new source of fossil fuels and we have to replace it with green and renewable sources.
Need for
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fuels
is mounting and limitation in amount of our
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energy
resources, made us to excavate in intact areas such as poles and oceans. In my view, we should not dig our globe remote areas to address our perpetual need for energy.

It is obvious that any transition in our
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source
of
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energy
require
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a lot of
expenditures and
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often
less advantage countries cannot
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with this astronomical prices.
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,
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sometimes
developing nations are not capable to shift towards
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new
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sources
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energy
due to technological obstacles.
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But
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often
the cost of seeking for
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new
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source
of
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fuels
is much more lessen than replacing all
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energy
consumer things such as cars, industries etc.
especially
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finally
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some
countries prefer to
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use
their existence
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sources
till they achieve advanced technology to can
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old
one.

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are not lasting forever and
are limited
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definitely they are going to
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next
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it is intellectual opt that we consider on
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new
, green and renewable
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source
of
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energy
instead
of devastating our globe intact places such as poles for seeking
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fossil
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fuels
.
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these kind
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are
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pollutant and have
been ruined
our environment and even lead to increase
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dangerous
disease such as skin and lung cancer.
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in long-run the cost of green and renewable
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of
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will be
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lessen
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current
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sources
. And
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developed countries
which are leading in this way should
be considered
as shining role models for other societies.

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conclusion I
reaffirm my position that we
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must
not devastated our environment for
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fuels and
we
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replace it with green and renewable
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IELTS essay is it good that we search for new source of fossil fuels?

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  American English
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295 words
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