Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. 5rLn
There is a contentious argument over whether social media platforms are affecting people and societies negatively. From my point of view, I strongly agree with this perspective due to various reasons related to how time-consuming it can be, and its impact on families’ financial status. The major reason why I agree with the statement that social networking sites can cause us to harm more than good is how addictive they can be. Companies use special algorithms to provide the users with what may grab their attention. Therefore, whenever we start scrolling in Instagram, Facebook, or Tik Tok, we find it very hard to leave our phones and continue working on what we should do. In a nutshell, wasting our time on social media is the first reason for the decrease in our productivity level as individuals as well as societies. Another reason why I support the notion is due to the fact that it can make families spend more than what really need. And that has the ability to raise the percentage of poor people in societies. To elaborate more, most companies are using artificial intelligence technology to spy and listen to the conversations the users are having. As well as analyzing their search history. They use these methods to control the advertisements users are seeing. So they can increase the income of the company. For instance, we have all noticed that we are continuously getting advertisements for those pair of virtual reality glasses we were thinking of buying. And it doesn’t stop until we actually buy them. To put in concisely, I completely agree that social networking sites are affecting us negatively as people and societies where it’s a waste of both time and money. Given this situation, it seems that we shouldn’t be spending a long time on social media platforms. But instead, using our time more wisely, taking care of our privacy, and trying not to get affected by all the advertisements we see.
There is a contentious argument over whether
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
media platforms are affecting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and societies
negatively
. From my point of view, I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this perspective due to various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reasons
related to how time-consuming it can be, and its impact on families’ financial status.

The major
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
why I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the statement that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networking sites can cause us to harm more than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
is how addictive they can be.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Companies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
special algorithms to provide the users with what may grab their attention.
Therefore
, whenever we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
scrolling in Instagram, Facebook, or
Did you mean "TikTok" (= social networking app)?
Tik Tok
, we find it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
our phones and continue working on what we should do. In a nutshell, wasting our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
media is the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
for the decrease in our productivity level as individuals
as well
as societies.

Another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
why I support the notion is due to the fact that it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
families spend more than what
really
need. And that has the ability to raise the percentage of poor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in societies. To elaborate more, most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are using artificial intelligence technology to spy and listen to the conversations the users are having.
As well
as analyzing their search history. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
these methods to control the advertisements users are seeing.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
they can increase the income of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
For instance
, we have all noticed that we are
continuously
getting advertisements for those pair of virtual reality glasses we were thinking of buying. And it doesn’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
until we actually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them.

To put in
concisely
, I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networking sites are affecting us
negatively
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and societies where it’s a waste of both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and money.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Given
this situation, it seems that we shouldn’t be spending a long
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
media platforms.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
instead
, using our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
more
wisely
, taking care of our privacy, and trying not to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by all the advertisements we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
.

IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?