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Many people believe that social networking sites ( such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree? v.5

Many people believe that social networking sites ( such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 5
A segment of society holds an opinion that social networking sites like Facebook have had an enormous negative influence on both people's and society. I firmly agree with the give statement to an extent because this delineates the increment in health related problems. Certain aspects relating to this situation will be discussed ahead before reaching its final verdict. To commence with, there are several reasons why this has a negative impact on society. Firstly, in order to maintain health, everyone has decreased the use of social sites and focus on the physical activity rather than the internet. Moreover, these sites also affect our body parts like the brain, eyes, and many more because the radiations which produced by mobile phones are very harmful and these radiations has negative impact on our parts of the human body. Therefore, due to all of the above reasons, social sites play a negative role in the surroundings. Proceeding further, even though with dire consequences, this also contain positive effects. Furthermore, this site helps to communicate with each other who are far from their because these contain various features like video calling and many more. Hence, due to this reason, it also ha merits. To encapsulate, although social networking sites have a negative impact, also has positive effects. All the sites should be used in limits because it helps to prevent form health hazards and maintain individual body fit.
A segment of society holds an opinion that
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social
networking
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sites
like Facebook have had an enormous
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negative
influence on both
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people
's and society. I
firmly
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agree
with the give statement to an extent
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because
this delineates the increment in health related problems. Certain aspects relating to this situation will
be discussed
ahead
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before
reaching its final verdict.

To commence with, there are several reasons why this has a
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negative
impact on society.
Firstly
, in order to maintain health, everyone has decreased the
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use
of
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social
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sites
and focus on the physical activity
rather
than the internet.
Moreover
, these
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sites
also
affect our body parts like the brain, eyes, and
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many
more
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because
the radiations which produced by mobile phones are
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very
harmful and these radiations has
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negative
impact on our parts of the human body.
Therefore
, due to
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all of the
above reasons,
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social
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sites
play a
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negative
role in the surroundings.

Proceeding
further
,
even though
with dire consequences, this
also
contain
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positive
effects.
Furthermore
, this
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site
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helps
to communicate with each other who are far from their
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because
these contain various features like video calling and
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many
more.
Hence
, due to this reason, it
also
ha merits.

To encapsulate, although
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social
networking
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sites
have a
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negative
impact,
also
has
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positive
effects. All the
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sites
should be
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used
in limits
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because
it
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helps
to
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prevent
form health hazards and maintain individual body fit.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites ( such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
234 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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