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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree? v. 125 v.22

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 125 v. 22
I totally disagree with this view. As far as I am concerned, the benefits the social networking sites bring to us is more than the negative impacts Firstly, these social networking sites helps broaden our horizons in terms of individuals. Foe example, like YouTube, these sites not only allow us to see the world with our little digital gadgets, but also help us to know more about people from the other countries by communicating with them instead of learning from the tourist brochures. It's undeniable that the fake news nowadays is also booming, but every coin has its two sides, compare with the unfavourable impacts than the desirable ones, there's more we can praise than blame on. Secondly, these social networking union the society. Some social media like Facebook and Instagram allows us to share and connect with people who are far from us. As a result, people can have a closer relationship with each other than before having these social networking sites. Before its invention, people can only share messages using doves, which takes a long time for one turn, but after these social media sites, people can share the messages within few minutes. Therefore, it gathers people together by being able to chat more often. To summarise, these sites are advantageous to us much more than the undesirable sides it has brought. Since they can help change our life by letting us know more about this world and connecting one and others, we should appreciate more about it than to depriving it.
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totally
disagree with this view. As far as I
am concerned
, the benefits the
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bring to us is more than the
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impacts


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, these
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networking
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sites
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helps
broaden our horizons in terms of individuals. Foe example, like YouTube, these
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sites
not
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allow
us to
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see
the world with our
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little
digital gadgets,
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also
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help
us to know more about
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people
from the other countries by communicating with them
instead
of learning from the tourist brochures. It's undeniable that the fake news nowadays is
also
booming,
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but
every coin has its two sides, compare with the
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unfavourable
impacts than the desirable ones, there's more we can praise than blame on.

Secondly
, these
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networking union the society.
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Some
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social
media like Facebook and Instagram
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allows
us to share and connect with
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people
who are far from us.
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,
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people
can have a closer relationship with each other than
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before
having these
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networking
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sites
.
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Before
its invention,
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people
can
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only
share messages using doves, which takes a long time for one turn,
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but
after these
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social
media
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sites
,
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people
can share the messages within few minutes.
Therefore
, it gathers
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people
together by being able to chat more
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often
.

To
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summarise
, these
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sites
are advantageous to us much more than the undesirable sides it has brought. Since they can
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help
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change
our life by letting us know more about this world and connecting one
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and others
, we should appreciate more about it than to depriving it.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 125 v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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