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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

Socialising online is great fun and a trend these days. It can be beneficial but at the same time, it may prove fatal as well. I partially agree that use of social sites, like Facebook, can adversely impact a person or the community. In On one hand, the networking on social websites helps people to be connected and know what's happening in one’s world, as it is an easy way of staying in touch with one another. For instance, I met one of my graduation friends on Facebook almost after almost twelve years. I tried all my sources to find him before, but only this helped. On the other hand, this showcases your personal life in front of public or people whom you probably do not know. Some can become jealous or some would and think you are showing off. Additionally, children can get addicted and attracted to some of these networking sites. For example, in 2016, 18 children died playing a game called ‘Blue Whale’ on Facebook, which basically motivates and encourages you to do dangerous activities like suicide. Moreover, your personal data and profile can be leaked or processed by an external entity for their own use. There has have been incidents where profile pictures were downloaded and then used unethically. A good illustration on example of this is the latest news of data leak by a company called ‘Cambridge Analytica’ where they which stole Facebook user’s data and sold it to many companies and political parties. In conclusion, one should limit the use of social sites just to browse and connecting to friends rather than divulging their personal information to anyone. Authorities and government should try and regulate the content so that it is not exposed to wider public or business entities. If necessary steps are not taken, then I agree to some extent that this can negatively affect a person or the society.
Socialising
online is great fun and a trend these days. It can be beneficial
but
at the same time, it may prove fatal
as well
. I
partially
agree
that
use
of social sites, like Facebook, can
adversely
impact a person or the community.

In On one hand, the networking on social websites
helps
people
to
be connected
and know what's happening in one’s world, as it is an easy way of staying in touch with one another.
For instance
, I met one of my graduation friends on Facebook almost after almost twelve years. I tried all my sources to find him
before
,
but
only
this
helped
.

On the other hand
, this showcases your personal life in front of public or
people
whom you
probably
do not know.
Some
can become jealous or
some
would and
think
you are showing off.
Additionally
, children can
get
addicted and attracted to
some
of these networking sites.
For example
, in 2016, 18 children
died
playing a game called ‘Blue Whale’ on Facebook, which
basically
motivates and encourages you to do
dangerous
activities like suicide.

Moreover
, your personal data and profile can
be leaked
or processed by an external entity for their
own
use
. There has have been incidents where profile pictures
were downloaded
and then
used
unethically
. A
good
illustration on example of this is the latest news of data leak by a
company
called ‘Cambridge Analytica’ where they which stole Facebook user’s data and sold it to
many
companies
and political parties.

In conclusion
, one should limit the
use
of social sites
just
to browse and connecting to friends
rather
than divulging their personal information to anyone. Authorities and
government
should try and regulate the content
so
that it is not exposed to wider public or business entities. If necessary steps are not taken, then I
agree
to
some
extent that this can
negatively
affect a person or the society.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society.

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