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Many people believe that in this modern world, wealth is more important than happiness. However, in my point of view, having fun is the most important thing in my life because for two reasons which I will illustrate in the following paragraphs.

Many people believe that in this modern world, wealth is more important than happiness. However, in my point of view, having fun is the most important thing in my life because for two reasons which I will illustrate in the following paragraphs. Many people believe that in this modern world, wealth is more important than happiness. However, in my point of view, having fun is the most important thing in my life because for two reasons which I will illustrate in the following paragraphs.

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Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 believe that in this modern world, wealth is more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgreatrelevantnecessaryextensiveinfluentialbig
important
 than happiness. However
, in my point of view, having fun is the most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgreatrelevantnecessaryextensiveinfluentialbig
important
 thing in my life This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 for two reasons which I will illustrate in the following paragraphs.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 believe that in this modern world, wealth is more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgreatrelevantnecessaryextensiveinfluentialbig
important
 than happiness. However
, in my point of view, having fun is the most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgreatrelevantnecessaryextensiveinfluentialbig
important
 thing in my life This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 for two reasons which I will illustrate in the following paragraphs. 