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Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having fixed punishment? v.1

Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having fixed punishment? v. 1
Most of the people suggest that the efficient way to punish criminal in various types of crimes should be fixed. In this aspect, there is an advantage of reducing the crime index. However, sometimes without considering the aspect of an offence may lead to unfairness among wrongdoers. To commence with, the primary benefit of strict punishments is helping in lowering the rate of crime. In other words, serious punishments, like the death penalty, lifetime imprisonment for crimes such as murder, rape, drug trafficking, are suitable punish the rule- breakers. For example, according to the publication of criminal justice journal, Saudi Arab country has been ranked top because of low crime rate due to its aggressive laws. Consequently, such dreadful rules deter the culprit to commit crimes. However, punishments are made to protect innocents. Unfortunately, Sometimes this may create unfairness among those who did wrong to save themselves. Some individuals commit minor crimes like robbery for feeding their family, kill someone in case of self defence. Due to these factors serious punishment sometimes may generate the feeling of injustice in the minds of wrongdoers, which might result into serious unethical issues, for example, The New Hindustan Times survey declared that more than 45% children from economically disadvantaged family commit crime deliberately to provide food to their parents unemployed and physically challenged parents. The implementation of strict rules can force culprit to create unwanted non-violence against the government. In conclusion, punishments for serious and major crimes are the best way to protect our society from defaulters. This is more beneficial in case of lowering the offence rate. However, the reasons behind crime should also be considered to prevent the unfairness among deliberate offenders.
Most of the
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people
suggest that the efficient way to punish criminal in various types of
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crimes
should be
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fixed
. In this aspect, there is an advantage of reducing the
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crime
index.
However
,
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sometimes
without considering the aspect of an
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offence
may lead to unfairness among wrongdoers.

To commence with, the primary benefit of strict
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punishments
is helping in lowering the rate of
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crime
.
In other words
,
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serious
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punishments
, like the death penalty, lifetime imprisonment for
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crimes
such as murder, rape, drug trafficking, are suitable punish the
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rule
- breakers.
For example
, according to the publication of criminal justice journal, Saudi Arab country has
been ranked
top
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because
of low
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crime
rate due to its aggressive laws.
Consequently
, such dreadful
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rules
deter the culprit to commit crimes.

However
,
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punishments
are made
to protect innocents. Unfortunately,
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Sometimes
this may create unfairness among those who did
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wrong
to save themselves.
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Some
individuals commit minor
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crimes
like robbery for feeding their family, kill someone in case of
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self defence
. Due to these factors
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serious
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punishment
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sometimes
may generate the feeling of injustice in the minds of wrongdoers, which might result into
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serious
unethical issues,
for example
, The New Hindustan Times survey declared that more than 45% children from
economically
disadvantaged family commit
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crime
deliberately
to provide food to their parents unemployed and
physically
challenged parents. The implementation of strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
can force culprit to create unwanted non-violence against the
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government
.

In conclusion
,
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punishments
for
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serious
and major
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crimes
are the best way to protect our society from defaulters. This is more beneficial in case of lowering the
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offence
rate.
However
, the reasons behind
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crime
should
also
be considered
to
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prevent
the unfairness among deliberate offenders.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having fixed punishment? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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