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Many people believe that family members have less communication with each other compared to the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that family members have less communication with each other compared to the past. WOnq
Families as the smallest part of society have always been considered and have undergone tremendous changes in recent years. One of them, which is supported by many people, is that we interact less in families than in the past and I completely agree with it on the basis of compelling reasons. Firstly, the modern lifestyle does not allow people to have much spare time to be with their family. That is, when we live in a competitive period that forces one to work longer hours than in the past in order to stay in competition fields, family time is reduced and it is abundantly clear that it leads to a reduction in family members' communication. This is, in fact, overshadowed by the needs of families and has faded because being in such an atmosphere requests more energy and concentration. Secondly, what weakens the interaction of family members is the physical distance. This feature, Which was in the past to a lesser extent, is enhanced by advanced technology that provides almost unlimited mobility. For instance, many youngsters leave their hometown to study or work in a different city or country while other family members stay there. Although they can be in touch with them, this gap affects the effectiveness of communication because people do not see others face to face. In conclusion, in my view, members of families communicate less than in the past since they do not enough leisure time and also can immigrate more.
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as the smallest part of society have always
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and have undergone tremendous
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changes
in recent years. One of them, which
is supported
by
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many
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, is that we interact less in
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families
than in the
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past
and I completely
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agree
with it on the basis of compelling reasons.

Firstly
, the modern lifestyle does not
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allow
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people
to have much spare time to be with their
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family
.
That is
, when we
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live
in a competitive period that forces one to work longer hours than in the
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past
in order to stay in competition fields,
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family
time is
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reduced
and it is
abundantly
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clear
that it leads to a reduction in
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family
members' communication. This is, in fact, overshadowed by the needs of
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families
and has faded
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because
being in such an atmosphere requests more energy and concentration.

Secondly
, what weakens the interaction of
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family
members is the physical distance. This feature, Which was in the
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past
to a lesser extent,
is enhanced
by advanced technology that provides almost unlimited mobility.
For instance
,
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many
youngsters
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leave
their hometown to study or work in a
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different
city or country while other
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family
members stay there. Although they can be in touch with them, this gap affects the effectiveness of communication
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because
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people
do not
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see
others face to face.

In conclusion
, in my view, members of
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families
communicate less than in the
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past
since they do not
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enough
leisure time and
also
can immigrate more.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that family members have less communication with each other compared to the past.

Essay
  American English
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245 words
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