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Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport. However, it is still unpopular in many countries. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population? v.1

Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport. However, it is still unpopular in many countries. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population? v. 1
It has been a while since the eco-friendly transportation bicycle was first introduced and its popularity seems like has decreased in many countries and this could have happened due to various reasons. However, some effective measures could be helpful to encourage the society to use cycles. A few decades ago bicycle was used as one of the main transportations and with the invention of motorised vehicles, the popularity of cycle has decreased. A cycle, in the past, was seen as far convenient than walking or using animal driven transports. People could move faster with the help of a cycle and that made this vehicle quite popular in many countries. However, when the motorised vehicle was introduced, people switched to that as later one is faster and can carry more goods at a time. The safe and green mode of transport - cycle, became less popular as people started using cars for commuting. Moreover, the safety of the cyclist is a significant issue. Because nowadays roads are full of motor vehicles, the safety of two wheelers cannot be ensured. In additions to that, slow speed discourages many people from the use of cycles. Finally, cycles are inefficient for long distance transportation. However, some key elements are there to gain back the cyclists to the road again. Firstly, governments should implement separate cycling path dedicated for the cyclist and that would ensure the safety of the cyclists. In addition to that, providing secure parking facilities will also encourage many to use cycles. Restriction on car ownership and increasing the price of fuel would encourage many to use cycle instead of driving cars. Finally, awareness campaigns to educate people about the health and environment benefits of using bicycle could be a great step to motivate more people to use it daily. To conclude, a government has a great role to play to motivate its citizens to use bicycles and this would guarantee a green environment and a healthy nation.
It has been a while since the eco-friendly transportation
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bicycle
was
first
introduced and its popularity seems like has decreased in
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many
countries and this could have happened due to various reasons.
However
,
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some
effective measures could be helpful to encourage the society to
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use
cycles.

A few decades ago
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bicycle
was
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used
as one of the main transportations and with the invention of
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motorised
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vehicles
, the popularity of
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cycle
has decreased. A
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cycle
, in the past, was
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seen
as far
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convenient
than walking or using animal driven transports.
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People
could
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move
faster with the
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help
of a
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cycle
and that made this
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vehicle
quite popular in
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many
countries.
However
, when the
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motorised
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vehicle
was introduced
,
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people
switched to that as later one is faster and can carry more
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goods
at a time. The safe and green mode of transport
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-
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cycle
, became less popular as
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people
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started
using cars for commuting.
Moreover
, the safety of the cyclist is a significant issue.
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Because
nowadays roads are full of motor
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vehicles
, the safety of
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two wheelers
cannot
be ensured
. In additions to that, slow speed discourages
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many
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people
from the
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use
of
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cycles
.
Finally
,
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cycles
are inefficient for long distance transportation.

However
,
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some
key elements are there to gain back the cyclists to the road again.
Firstly
,
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governments
should implement separate cycling path dedicated for the cyclist and that would ensure the safety of the cyclists.
In addition
to that, providing secure parking facilities will
also
encourage
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many
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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cycles
. Restriction on car ownership and increasing the price of fuel would encourage
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many
to
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use
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cycle
instead
of driving cars.
Finally
, awareness campaigns to educate
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people
about the health and environment benefits of using
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bicycle
could be a great step to motivate more
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people
to
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use
it daily.

To conclude
, a
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government
has a great role to play to motivate its citizens to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycles
and this would guarantee a green environment and a healthy nation.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport. However, it is still unpopular in many countries. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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