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Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport However it is still unpopular in many countries What are the reasons What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population v.1

Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport However it is still unpopular in many countries What are the reasons What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population v. 1
Working from an early age has been a debatable subject over time. While some people consider that young people should start working as soon as possible, others think the opposite. This essay will discuss both views and will share the author’s personal opinion about it. To begin with, teenagers having part-time jobs have been a common practice since ancient times. These jobs usually are for a shorter period of time, according to youngster’s possibilities and have a significant role in their development. Moreover, the sense of reward for their work gives them self-confidence and motivation to learn and improve their skills. For example, if a teenager starts working in a company during his/her studies, he/she will be motivated to learn more in order to be promoted in that company and to be better paid for his work. So, working from an early age could have many benefits for young people. On the other hand, some people consider that teenagers should not work at all. They claim that at an early age a child should focus on education rather then work. In addition, there are many situations when the work becomes an abuse and children cannot protect themselves against their rulers. For example, in the poor countries, they are doing a lot of physical work that overweigh their capabilities and, at the same time, they have no time for education. Therefore, they should not work, but focus on their education and their growth. In conclusion, working from an early age is a questionable subject with different perspectives. While some people encourage part-time work as a tool for young people's development, others are against it, thinking about the drawbacks like abusing, lacking of time for education and so on. In my opinion, education should be the first priority at this age, but some part-time jobs, during holidays for example, could be extremely helpful for young people. These temporary jobs could give them a sense of reality and make them realize what and why it is important to study at school.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport However it is still unpopular in many countries What are the reasons What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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