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Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay. It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money. What are your opinions on this? v.1

Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay. It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money. What are your opinions on this? v. 1
In most countries all over the world, homework has been assigned to students to help them practice. While there are some arguments against the setting of homework, I am of the opinion that homework is an essential aspect of education. There are several reasons why people argue that exercises should not be assigned to students. First of all, it could put more pressure on students who have already been overloaded with many subjects. At school, they have to absorb a huge amount of knowledge of various subjects such as History, Maths and English. Therefore, they may feel stressed out when spending hours and hours finishing their assignments. Another negative side of homework would be that it may limit the students’ play time. It is known that nowadays, most of them need to attend extra classes besides going to school. Having to complete homework every day means that students can hardly afford time to relax and enjoy themselves. Despite the above arguments, I firmly hold the view that tasks need to be assigned to school children for several reasons. The main reason is that it could help students improve their academic performance. It is widely acknowledged that learning theories without practicing is indeed pointless. Doing assignments enable students to consolidate their knowledge by applying what they have been taught into exercises, which may lead to higher exam results. More importantly, homework can assist students in developing habits that may be beneficial for them in the future. This is because they need to work on their own to complete their tasks, which may allow them to develop independent working and problem solving skills as they become fully grown adults later. In conclusion, there could be some drawbacks of giving homework to school children, but I believe that it plays a key role in educating children.
In most countries all over the world,
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homework
has
been assigned
to
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students
to
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help
them practice. While there are
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some
arguments against the setting of
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homework
, I am of the opinion that
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homework
is an essential aspect of education.

There are several reasons why
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people
argue that exercises should not
be assigned
to
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students
.
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First of all
, it could put more pressure on
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students
who have already
been overloaded
with
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many
subjects. At
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school
, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
absorb a huge amount of knowledge of various subjects such as History,
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Maths
and English.
Therefore
, they may feel
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stressed
out when spending hours and hours finishing their assignments. Another
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negative
side of
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homework
would be that it may limit the
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students’
play time. It
is known
that nowadays, most of them need to attend extra classes
besides
going to
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school
. Having to complete
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homework
every day means that
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students
can hardly afford time to relax and enjoy themselves.

Despite the above arguments, I
firmly
hold the view that tasks need to
be assigned
to
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school
children for several reasons. The main reason is that it could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their academic performance. It is
widely
acknowledged that learning theories without practicing is
indeed
pointless. Doing assignments enable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to consolidate their knowledge by applying what they have
been taught
into exercises, which may lead to higher exam results. More
importantly
,
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homework
can assist
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in developing habits that may be beneficial for them in the future. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they need to work on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
to complete their tasks, which may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
them to develop independent working and problem solving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
as they become
fully
grown adults later.

In conclusion
, there could be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
drawbacks of giving
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homework
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
children,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I believe that it plays a key role in educating children.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay. It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money. What are your opinions on this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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