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19 10 2017 Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money What are your opinion on this Give reasons fo v.1

19 10 2017 Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money What are your opinion on this Give reasons fo v. 1
Transport congestion is the most common problem that every large city is facing these days. In my opinion, the increasing number of car owners and breaching of travel rules are major issues of automobile jams. To commence with, there are numerous reasons for gridlock blockage. The first reason is an increase in the number of transportation owners. It indicates that individuals are purchasing motors to travel and avoiding inefficient public transport services during peak hours. As a result of this, high volumes of cars run on the narrow roads of the cities. This creates busy and crowded roads. For instance, most Chinese escape using public buses in the morning because of travel jams and keeping away from paying expensive bus fares. The second reason is violation of service rules by public transport users. If individuals are disobeying road protocol, then there is a higher possibility of transport jams. The failing adhere to road rules have generated the immense automobile congestions. In order to solve these challenges, the government has to implement strict regulations to minimise transportation congestion. The first solution is to introduce effective transportation with cheaper fares for public. For example, allowing citizens to use public automobile for free during prime hours. This helps to decrease vehicles on the road. The second remedy is to apply rigid fines for travel light offenders. This step allows citizens to be responsible for their actions, hence, increasing personal awareness on breaching transport rules. In this way the government can reduce gridlock blockages. In conclusion, service congestion is a big problem in large city which can be minimised, if the government take strike action against transportation offenders.
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Transport
congestion is the most common problem that every large city is facing these days. In my opinion, the increasing number of car owners and breaching of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
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rules
are major issues of automobile jams.

To commence with, there are numerous reasons for gridlock blockage. The
first
reason is an increase in the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
owners. It indicates that individuals are purchasing motors to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
and avoiding inefficient
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public
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transport
services during peak hours.
As a result
of this, high volumes of cars run on the narrow
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roads
of the cities. This creates busy and crowded
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roads
.
For instance
, most Chinese escape using
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public
buses in the morning
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because
of
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travel
jams and keeping away from paying expensive bus fares. The second reason is violation of service
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rules
by
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public
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transport
users. If individuals are disobeying
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road
protocol, then there is a higher possibility of
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transport
jams. The failing adhere to
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road
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rules
have generated the immense automobile congestions.

In order to solve these challenges, the
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government
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has to
implement strict regulations to
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minimise
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transportation
congestion. The
first
solution is to introduce effective
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transportation
with cheaper fares for
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public
.
For example
, allowing citizens to
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use
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public
automobile for free during prime hours. This
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helps
to decrease vehicles on the
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road
. The second remedy is to apply rigid fines for
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travel
light offenders. This step
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allows
citizens to be responsible for their actions,
hence
, increasing personal awareness on breaching
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transport
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rules
. In this way the
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government
can
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reduce
gridlock blockages.

In conclusion
, service congestion is a
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big
problem in large city which can be
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minimised
, if the
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government
take strike action against
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transportation
offenders.
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IELTS essay 19 10 2017 Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money What are your opinion on this Give reasons fo v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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