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Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good thing? v.1

Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good thing? v. 1
It is often argued, that most of couples are paying an enourmous amout of money to cover the expenses of their wedding day. In my opinion, I believe that it is more advantageous to spend the money on either more valuable items or to save them, rather than spending all of the couple savings in one night. To beging with, it is commonly known that with marriage comes along various responsibilities and the rates of expenses gradually increase. In other words, the majority of people choose to withdraw personal loans pay for their wedding ceremony. Hence, they will start their new life with a vast debt, where they will be obliged to to overwok themselves to cover their debt leaving no time for a couple to spend together. As a result, a tension will arise leading some couple to either seperate or divorce. Moreover, a royal wedding does not have to be expensive to be considered lovely, therefore, the bride and the groom should do their researches to figure out a smar method to divide their money wisely. To state this in other terms, being cautious in choosing packages for a wedding, can save tons of dollars. Consequently, a couple can spend their savings not only on a ceremony but also on their honeymoon that they will always remember and cherish. For instance, a bride can choose flowers found in the current season, instead of choosing to import them. This they will be saving half of the price of flower packages. In conclusion, it is undediable that a lovely wedding will be satisfying both the groom and the bride. However, reasonable and smart choices will not only lead for a healthier furture but also more memories and places to spend the money.
It is
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often
argued, that most of
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couples
are paying an
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enourmous
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amout
of
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money
to cover the expenses of their
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wedding
day. In my opinion, I believe that it is more advantageous to
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spend
the
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money
on either more valuable items or to save them,
rather
than spending
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all of the
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couple
savings in one night.

To
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beging
with, it is
commonly
known that with marriage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
along various responsibilities and the rates of expenses
gradually
increase.
In other words
, the majority of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
choose to withdraw personal loans pay for their
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wedding
ceremony.
Hence
, they will
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start
their new life with a vast debt, where they will
be obliged
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to to
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overwok
themselves to cover their debt leaving no time for a
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couple
to
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spend
together.
As a result
, a tension will arise leading
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some
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couple
to either
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seperate
or divorce.

Moreover
, a royal
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wedding
does not
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have to
be expensive to
be considered
lovely,
therefore
, the bride and the groom should do their researches to figure out a
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smar
method to divide their
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money
wisely
. To state this in other terms, being cautious in choosing packages for a
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wedding
, can save tons of dollars.
Consequently
, a
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couple
can
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spend
their savings not
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only
on a ceremony
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but
also
on their honeymoon that they will always remember and cherish.
For instance
, a bride can choose flowers found in the
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current
season,
instead
of choosing to import them. This they will be saving half of the price of flower packages.

In conclusion
, it is
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undediable
that a lovely
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wedding
will be satisfying both the groom and the bride.
However
, reasonable and smart choices will not
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only
lead for a healthier
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furture
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but
also
more memories and places to
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spend
the
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money
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good thing? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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