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Many people are opting for holistic medicine rather than conventional medicine as a form of treatment for incurable diseases. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such practice? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.

Many people are opting for holistic medicine rather than conventional medicine as a form of treatment for incurable diseases. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such practice? pLpb3
Undeniably, the method of cure is changing. It is an irrefutable fact that people are choosing holistic medicines instead of conventional medicines. Although, many may see it as a positive phenomenon but it is not a trend without drawbacks. Both the benefits and darker side of existence would be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, holistic medicines is the medicine that heals the body, soul and mind. It just treat the symptoms of an illness as well promoting healthy lifestyle changes, and preferring natural treatments. For example, one of the most common medicine is massage therapy. Massage Therapy has been found to be an effective treatment to many health issues, such as constant pain and general anxiety. On the contrary, this trend has certain negative shades. Firstly, conventional medicines is based on modern science which evaluates the human body, its disorders, and medical treatments. For these, the treatment method they use is radiation, drugs and surgery. Apart from that a person suffering from a deadly disease might end up losing his life if, not diagnosed with proper medical care. In chronic cases, holistic medicines have not yet proved to be useful and studies show that they may even worsen the condition. Even for the new or exixting virus, flu's can only be treated by the advance science. The ancient methods have no solutions related to them. To coclude, hollistic medicine is a great healer and can benefit a person a lot more than the conventional medicines. However, there is still need to know about the seriousness of the discomfort. All what is required logical, rational and balanced approach towards it.
Undeniably
, the method of cure is changing. It is an irrefutable fact that
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people
are choosing holistic medicines
instead
of conventional medicines. Although,
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many may
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see
it as a
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positive
phenomenon
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but
it is not a trend without drawbacks. Both the benefits and darker side of existence would
be discussed
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with, holistic medicines is the
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medicine
that heals the body, soul and mind. It
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
Did you mean "treats"?
treat
the symptoms of an illness
as well
promoting healthy lifestyle
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
, and preferring natural
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treatments
.
For example
, one of the most common
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medicine
is massage therapy. Massage Therapy has
been found
to be an effective
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treatment
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
health issues, such as constant pain and general anxiety.

On the contrary
, this trend has certain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
shades.
Firstly
, conventional medicines
is based
on modern science which evaluates the human body, its disorders, and medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
treatments
. For these, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
treatment
method they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
is radiation, drugs and surgery. Apart from that a person suffering from a deadly disease might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up losing his life if, not diagnosed with proper medical care. In chronic cases, holistic medicines have not
yet
proved to be useful and studies
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show
that they may even worsen the condition. Even for the new or
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exixting
virus, flu's can
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only
be treated
by the advance science. The ancient methods have no solutions related to them.

To
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coclude
,
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hollistic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is a great healer and can benefit a person a lot more than the conventional medicines.
However
, there is
still
need to know about the seriousness of the discomfort. All what
is required
logical, rational and balanced approach towards it.
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IELTS essay Many people are opting for holistic medicine rather than conventional medicine as a form of treatment for incurable diseases. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such practice?

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