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Some people doing job for money but why some people have a job?

Some people doing job for money but why some people have a job? W57Vq

There are lots of people working for money but some people have a job because they want to spend quality of time. They feel boring when they have nothing to do. Similarly there are few individual working hard for their fitness, they just want to improve their fitness level by doing any job. People also have a job to make some new friends and they want to give something in community. Some people are working for society and some people working to complete their hours for pension plane. pension also required to complete specific hours.

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people
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working
 for money This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 have a job This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they want to spend quality of time. They feel boring when they have nothing to do. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Similarly,
Similarly
 there are few individual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 for their fitness, they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 want to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 their fitness level by doing any job. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
also
 have a job to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 new Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).friends, and
friends and
 they want to give something in community. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 are You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
 for society and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
 to complete their hours for pension This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:aircraft
plane
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterPension
pension
also
 required to complete specific hours. 