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Many people are of the opinion that schools should reward students who show the best performance in their studies, whereas it claims that students with positive progress need a reward. In this essay, these two views can be discussed in- depth.

Many people are of the opinion that schools should reward students who show the best performance in their studies, whereas it claims that students with positive progress need a reward. In this essay, these two views can be discussed in- depth. dopqK
Many people are of the opinion that schools should reward students who show the best performance in their studies, whereas it claims that students with positive progress need a reward. In this essay, these two views can be discussed in- depth. On the one hand, some arguments lend support to the opinion that it is indispensable to encourage excellent students. Firstly, it is worth the incentives because these students put all their determination into studying and make relentless e#orts. Secondly, diligent ones often desire to conquer prizes and do not want to be left behind by their peers; therefore, rewarding them can create a highly competitive learning environment where students are more likely to progress. Furthermore, this is a favorable opportunity to nurture gifted students, for instance, outstanding ones are annually sent to compete in the internationa] competition. Their achievements make a significant contribution to the nationa] sustainable prosperity. On the other hand, many believe rewarding students who make considerabk progress is thoroughly reasonable. Firstly, by taking this step, school administrators express their thoughtful attention to educational psychology and provide students with equal opportunities in the learning environment. Thanks to that, instead of feeling frustrated when competing with their top classmates, they will feel motivated when their e#orts are highly appreciated. Secondly, giving incentives to average students reminds people that the original purpose of learning is to acquire knowledge and how to apply it efhciently, not to achieve high scores. As a consequence, several common negative phenomena such as stress, anxiety, and cheating would reduce. In conclusion, although there are convincing arguments for both views, I hold a firm beliefthat schools should always encourage students whether they are the best or not.
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desire to conquer prizes and do not

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therefore
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highly
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where
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students
are more likely to progress.

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opportunity to nurture gifted
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sustainable
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by taking this step, school administrators

express their thoughtful attention to

educational psychology and provide

students with equal opportunities in the

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learning
environment. Thanks to that,

instead
of feeling frustrated when

competing with their top classmates, they

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appreciated.
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reminds

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people
that the original purpose of

learning is to acquire knowledge and how

to apply it
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efhciently
, not to achieve high

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scores
. As a consequence, several
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common


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phenomena such as
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,

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IELTS essay Many people are of the opinion that schools should reward students who show the best performance in their studies, whereas it claims that students with positive progress need a reward. In this essay, these two views can be discussed in- depth.

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