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Many people and scientists believe that playing video games is a waste of time and energy for the children and since the children are the cornerstone of a bright future for a prosprose society, they should not be allowed to play them. With that being said

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According to the passage there has been two main theories about the reasons why sea otter population started declining. The first theory is environmental pollution and the second theory is attacks by predators. Three main reasons to support the first theory where discussed in the passage and also based on the lecture, answers have been provided for each reason and all of aformentioned reasons and responses will be addressed in next paragraphs. The first mentioned reason based on the first theory for atter declining was that there has been water samples that shows the polluted water in the area. The professor provides a solid example that if that was true then dead bodies of animal should've been found by the shore, while there was never anything found, on the other hand the fact that no dead bodies were found supports the second theory that states that the predators are the reason for population decline. The second reason is that even if the predators were the reason of this trajedy, the effect should've been on other sea mammals as well, but the facts say otherwise. According to the professor the change of diet in orca actually may cause this phenamenon since the whales were in danger because of humans they left and then the orca needed to feed on sea otters. Finally the third reason states that because the pollution is more concentrated on some areas and not on others, it explains that why the population density is lower in that areas. This claime is answered easily, since the predators tend to hunt where they can easily go and hunt, therefore the sea otter population in deep waters has declined but not in shallow waters where they can not go easily.

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