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In the set of material, writer state about the altruism, it means animal sacrifices his own interest for other animal.

In the set of material, writer state about the altruism, it means animal sacrifices his own interest for other animal. wBXrN
In the set of material, writer state about the altruism, it means animal sacrifices his own interest for other animal. Writer gives two examples of altruism. Instead of that in listening section professor mentions about there are not benefits of that animal that sacrifices his interest. Firstly, in reading passage writer gives the example of humans act like shearing food with strangers and, the donation of organs to the family members or a complete strangers such act of is called altruism. However in the lecture professor state about there is no any kind of benefit to the donor from society of the organs receiving family. Secondly, writer state in passage, many species of animals is willing to sacrifice their food for other members. The meerkat, an individual acts as a sentinel, meerkat sees a predator whose are danger for the group of meerkat. The meerkat who sees a predator he goes back without eating food, he get nothing bug still he is giving alarm to the other member of group. Instead of that in listening section, professor tells about sometime this meerkat lost their life for the other member of group. They don’t get anything. In conclusion, Altruism is the process of sacrificing own interest for other member of group of animals. Many animals are sacrifice their life for other but they couldn't get anything from them.
In the set of material,
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writer
state about the
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altruism
, it means
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animal
sacrifices his
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own
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interest for
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other
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animal
.
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Writer
gives two examples of
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altruism
.
Instead
of that in listening section professor
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mentions about there
are not benefits of that
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animal
that sacrifices his interest.

Firstly
, in reading passage
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writer
gives the example of humans act like shearing food with strangers and, the donation of organs to the family
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members
or a complete
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strangers
such act of
is called
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altruism
.
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However
in the lecture professor state about there is
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no
any kind of benefit to the donor from society of the organs receiving family.

Secondly
,
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writer
state in passage,
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many
species of
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animals
is willing to sacrifice their food for
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other
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members
. The
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meerkat
, an individual acts as a sentinel,
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meerkat
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sees
a predator whose are
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danger
for the
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group
of
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meerkat
. The
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meerkat
who
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sees
a predator he goes back without eating food, he
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get
nothing bug
still
he is giving alarm to the
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other
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member
of
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group
.
Instead
of that in listening section, professor
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tells
about sometime this
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meerkat
lost their
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life
for the
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other
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member
of
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group
. They don’t
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get
anything.

In conclusion
,
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Altruism
is the process of sacrificing
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own
interest for
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other
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member
of
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group
of
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animals
.
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Many
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animals
are sacrifice their
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life
for
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other
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but
they couldn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
anything from them.

IELTS essay In the set of material, writer state about the altruism, it means animal sacrifices his own interest for other animal.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
227 words
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