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Rembrandt and his painting

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In the set of material, in reading passage writer present three main reasons, why the painting was removed from the official catalogue of Rembrandt’s paintings in the 1930s. On the other hand, in lecture professor gives the evidence of resent research and oppose the writing section. First, in reading section, writer states about the woman’s portrait dress. She is wearing a white linen cap, that only servants would wear yet also, coat wearing by woman has luxurious fur collar that servant couldn’t afford. Rembrandt has good knowledge about clothing; hence he couldn’t do that type of mistake. Instead of that in lecture professor state that the analyst of pigment and the result of X-ray prove that the painting is repainted after hundred year of original painting made. It is repainted for increase the basic value of painting. Second, Rembrandt was a genius in light and shadow, but in painting face appears to be illuminated by light reflect onto it from below. But below the face is the dark fur collar, which would absorb light, rather reflect it. So the face appears partially in shadow- which is not how it appears. In other hand, professor state the reason of that appears. From his point of view the woman wearing a light color cloths and the colors of cloths are reflect on the face. So the face of woman is not in the shadow. Finally, in reading section, it is observe that back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a several pieces of wood glued together. None of the painting of Rembrandt paint on several pieces of wood glued together. He painted a painting on a single piece of wood glued. In lecture professor state that when fur collar is added, the wood panel is also enlarge. So the several pieces of wood is added on the top side of painting. Professor also state that the original painting is painted on single piece of wood. These pieces of wood are added in painting for making painting more grand and valuable. In the end it is clear that the original painting is made by Rembrandt, and these painting is repainted and modify for increase his value and for making more grand and valuable. After the research the painting was added official catalogue of Rembrandt’s painting.
In the set of material, in reading passage writer present three main reasons, why the
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painting
was removed
from the official
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catalogue
of Rembrandt’s
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paintings
in the 1930s.
On the other hand
, in lecture
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professor
gives the evidence of resent research and oppose the writing section.

First
, in reading section, writer
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states
about the
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woman’s
portrait dress. She is wearing a white linen cap, that
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only
servants would wear
yet
also
, coat wearing by
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woman
has luxurious fur collar that servant couldn’t afford. Rembrandt has
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good
knowledge about clothing;
hence
he couldn’t do that type of mistake.
Instead
of that in lecture
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professor
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state
that the analyst of pigment and the result of X-ray prove that the
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painting
is repainted
after
Use "a hundred" or use a number before 'hundred'.
hundred
year of original
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painting
made. It
is repainted
for increase the basic value of painting.

Second, Rembrandt was a genius in
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light
and shadow,
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but
in
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painting
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face
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appears
to
be illuminated
by
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light
reflect onto it from below.
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But
below the
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face
is the dark fur collar, which would absorb
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light
,
rather
reflect it.
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So
the
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face
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appears
partially
in shadow- which is not how it
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appears
. In other hand,
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professor
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state
the reason of that
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appears
. From his point of view the
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woman
wearing a
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light
color cloths and the colors of cloths are
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reflect
on the
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face
.
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So
the
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face
of
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woman
is not in the shadow.

Finally
, in reading section, it is
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observe
that back of the
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painting
reveals that it
was painted
on a several
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pieces
of
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wood
glued together. None of the
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painting
of Rembrandt paint on several
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pieces
of
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wood
glued together. He painted a
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painting
on a single
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piece
of
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wood
glued. In lecture
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professor
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state
that when fur collar is
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added
, the
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wood
panel is
also
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enlarge
.
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So
the several
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pieces
of
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wood
is
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added
on the top side of
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painting
.
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Professor
also
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state
that the original
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painting
is painted
on single
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piece
of
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wood
. These
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pieces
of
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wood
are
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added
in
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painting
for making
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painting
more grand and valuable.

In the
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end
it is
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clear
that the original
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painting
is made
by Rembrandt, and these
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painting
is repainted
and modify for increase his value and for making more grand and valuable.
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After
the research the
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painting
was
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added
official
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catalogue
of Rembrandt’s
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painting
.
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IELTS essay Rembrandt and his painting

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
385 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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