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Many people all over the world do not have jobs at all, or do not have adequate jobs. What are the causes of this problem and what can be done to solve it?

Many people all over the world do not have jobs at all, or do not have adequate jobs. What are the causes of this problem and what can be done to solve it? JL276
In this competitive world, when the competitions is becoming steep so, job industry is becoming more and more professional. Millions of people worldwide either they have to deal with dearth of jobs or shortage of jobs. This essay will not only discuss the hurdles related to the aformentioned issue but also the solution will be provided in the upcoming paragraph. To embark with, there are mainly two prominent barriers of the woe. Firstly, the main reason is recession in which nowadays, it is ongoing across the world. In other words, having said this, recession occurs when something extreme happens in the society in that case unemployment folks wants to encounter plethora of adversity in they life For example, in India, appropriate more than 35% of people loss then job du to the fact of covid-19. Secondly, it is well-know fact that the if the particular business only not in the accurate path and the business is not earning impose financial then the owner of the company will likely to suspended to the workers. As a consequence, the rate of jobless people will likely to rise. Further more, significantly serious steps needed to be taken to sooth the woe is that the regulatory authority ought to establish the newly companies in terms of the jobless masses by performing this it will not only get benefit to the particular person but also that for nation owing to by passing the time the proportion of economy would be increased in the future. Moreover, specific company should be started to introduce work from home by those people who the company wants to suspend in which the company also get profit and citizen also. For instance, In New Zealand, almost more than 50 % of citizens is working form they accommodation. In conclusion, having gone through this matter it conclude that the although company should also get profit and nor loss, yet rusticate to the employee is not an appropriate way.
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is
becoming steep
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so
,
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job
industry is becoming more and more professional. Millions of
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people
worldwide either they
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have to
deal with dearth of
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jobs
or shortage of
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jobs
. This essay will not
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only
discuss the hurdles related to the
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aformentioned
issue
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but
also
the solution will
be provided
in the upcoming paragraph.

To embark with, there are
mainly
two prominent barriers of the woe.
Firstly
, the main reason is recession in which nowadays, it is ongoing across the world.
In other words
, having said this, recession occurs when something extreme happens in the society
in that case
unemployment folks wants to encounter plethora of adversity in
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they life
For example
, in India, appropriate more than 35% of
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people
loss then
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job
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du
to the fact of
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covid-19
.
Secondly
, it is well-know fact that the if the particular business
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only
not in the accurate path and the business is not earning impose financial then the owner of the
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company
will likely to suspended to the workers. As a consequence, the rate of jobless
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people
will likely to rise.

Further
more,
significantly
serious steps needed to
be taken
to sooth the woe is that the regulatory authority ought to establish the
newly
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companies
in terms of the jobless masses by performing this it will not
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only
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get
benefit to the particular person
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but
also
that for nation owing to
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by passing
the time the proportion of economy would
be increased
in the future.
Moreover
, specific
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company
should be
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started
to introduce work from home by those
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people
who the
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company
wants to suspend in which the
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company
also
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get
profit and citizen
also
.
For instance
, In New Zealand, almost more than 50 % of citizens is working form
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they accommodation
.

In conclusion
, having gone through this matter it
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conclude
that the although
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company
should
also
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get
profit and nor loss,
yet
rusticate to the employee is not an appropriate way.
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IELTS essay Many people all over the world do not have jobs at all, or do not have adequate jobs. What are the causes of this problem and what can be done to solve it?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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