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Many parents today are allowing their children access to laptops, tablets and/or smartphones every day. Some feel that there should be stricter limits put on this screen time. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Smartphones became essential belongings in our lives. And PC or portable computer, like tablet, are familiar devices in school these days. “These devices are wonderful. ” Some moms and dads would say. One big reason why they love is kids become quiet when they are using it. Most children do games on screen. Games are creative now so kids love. Parents can do their work while their little ones concentrate on screens. But recently there are unhappy researches. They noticed a side affect of using screen devices. Specialists alert us to let kids allowed using devices without rules. The research said mainly two things. First is Cyber crime. Young kids are unfortunately easily involved in crime through the Internet. The second thing is addiction. Addiction leads a lack of real communication. Attachment, Love can only get from parents or other caregivers and between people’s real eye to eyecommunication. Even the game on the screen is focused on communication and socialization, it is not enough. We are in technology world and can not close our eyes and turn our back. But we can use these devices in safe. I would like to set two rules. I am a boy’s mom and my son likes playing games on tablet. We discussed and set a time rule. He can play thirty minutes a day and not at night. The another rule is a place. I do not allow him to switch on tablets in his bedroom. He plays in the same room with me like living room. We can live happily with a “digital magical notebook”, if we think before turn on.
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. And PC or portable computer, like tablet, are familiar
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devices
in school these days.

“These
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devices
are wonderful. ”
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Some
moms and dads would say. One
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big
reason why they
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love
is
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kids
become quiet when they are using it. Most children do
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games
on screen.
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Games
are creative
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now
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so
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kids
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love
. Parents can do their work while their
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little
ones concentrate on screens.

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But
recently there are unhappy researches. They noticed a side affect of using screen
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devices
. Specialists alert us to
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let
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kids
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allowed
using
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devices
without
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rules
.

The research said
mainly
two things.
First
is Cyber crime. Young
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kids
are unfortunately
easily
involved in crime through the Internet. The second thing is addiction. Addiction leads a lack of real communication. Attachment,
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Love
can
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only
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get
from parents or other caregivers and between
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people
’s real eye to eyecommunication. Even the game on the screen
is focused
on communication and socialization, it is not
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enough
.

We are in technology world and can not close our eyes and turn our back.
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But
we can
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use
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
in safe. I would like to set two
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
. I am a boy’s mom and my son likes playing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
on tablet. We discussed and set a time
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
. He can play thirty minutes a day and not at night. The another
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
is a place. I do not
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allow
him to switch on tablets in his bedroom. He plays in the same room with me like living room. We can
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live
happily
with a “digital magical notebook”, if we
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think
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before
turn on.

IELTS essay Many parents today are allowing their children access to laptops, tablets and/or smartphones every day. Some feel that there should be stricter limits put on this screen time.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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