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Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v.9

Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v. 9
It is a fact that some governments are preserving many historical buildings these days. A group of people believe that protecting these old buildings is considered as a waste of money, as they should be demolished and replaced with new buildings. I personally believe that maintaining an old building is essential, since the building has a lot of historical values, and it would be unique to see cities that combined the modern and historical buildings together. It is believed that protecting some historical buildings is important since they have historical values. Many of the buildings had become the witnesses of some special or tragic moments of a particular country, therefore it should be preserved. One of the examples would be the Fatahilah Museum in Central Jakarta, Indonesia. It is an old building that was erected during the Dutch colonial era in the 18th century and formerly used as a prison to punish the rebellion. Now, it is maintained by the Government as a museum to commemorate the people who had sacrificed their life for the independence of Indonesia. Some cities are still protecting their historical buildings, though new high rise buildings are showing up in the surrounding area. The historical buildings are maintained by the state government and they are standing along with the new skyscrapers. Many people believe that the combination of these old and modern buildings have made the city become fascinating and attractive. As a result, they become one of the tourist destination places. Some of the cities that have preserved them would be Beijing, London and Paris, and more than thousands of people have visited these metropolis cities. In conclusion, retaining the historical buildings is definitely an important thing, because they had become eye-witnesses of some important events. And it is a fact that combination of old and modern buildings brings a lot of benefits for the city and the country as well.
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historical
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people
believe that protecting these
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old
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buildings
is considered
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be demolished
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buildings
. I
personally
believe that maintaining an
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old
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building
is essential, since the
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has
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historical
values, and it would be unique to
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see
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cities
that combined the modern and
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historical
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buildings
together.

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is believed
that protecting
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historical
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since they have
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historical
values.
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of the
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buildings
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the witnesses of
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some
special or tragic moments of a particular country,
therefore
it should
be preserved
. One of the examples would be the
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Fatahilah
Museum in Central Jakarta, Indonesia. It is an
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old
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that
was erected
during the Dutch colonial era in the 18th century and
formerly
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used
as a prison to punish the rebellion.
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by the
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Government
as a museum to commemorate the
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people
who had sacrificed their
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life
for the independence of Indonesia.

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cities
are
still
protecting their
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historical
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buildings
, though new high rise
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buildings
are showing up in the surrounding area. The
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historical
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buildings
are maintained
by the state
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government and
they are standing along with the new skyscrapers.
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people
believe that the combination of these
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and modern
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buildings
have made the city
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become
fascinating and attractive.
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, they
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one of the tourist destination places.
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Some of the
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cities
that have preserved them would be Beijing, London and Paris, and more than thousands of
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people
have visited these metropolis cities.

In conclusion
, retaining the
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historical
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buildings
is definitely an
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thing,
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they had
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become
eye-witnesses of
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events
. And it is a fact that combination of
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old
and modern
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brings
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a lot of
benefits for the city and the country
as well
.
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IELTS essay Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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