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Many nations, nowadays, are competing for right to host international sporting events.however, some people think it is not a good idea.discuss both views and mention your opinion.

Many nations, nowadays, are competing for right to host international sporting events. however, some people think it is not a good idea. O78p
A number of countries, in the present time are engaged in hosting the world wide sports competitions. But a section of the society do not prefer it as a superior prospective. I will discuss both the issues in the forth coming paragraphs with reasons supported by some examples and at last will be giving a concrete conclusion. To begin with, some people opine this because, by this a number of spectators will be coming all around the globe. The government has to spend a lot of money in the facilities including accomodation, food and many more others. Apart from this the cost of organising the event and managing the expenses will gradually decrease the economy. On the other hand, the positives can be, the government has to spend only once after that the fares of the event will totally be added in the economy. Moreover, it will boost up the construction of infrastructure which will facilitate the public as well. Furthermore, there will be a number of job opportunities which increase and provide jobs to the unemployed people. In addition to this some of the native sports persons will also get some lime-light and can earn some respect while competing in the games. To recapitulate, some people take it as positive some take it as negative, but in my opinion it is a plus point for every country which is making efforts in organising these global competitions. Because by this a number of peasants can get a living by earning jobs which are provided during the whole process of organising the event as well as keep the event going with no problems in between.
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of countries, in the present time
are engaged
in hosting the
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world wide
sports competitions.
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a section of the society do not prefer it as a superior prospective. I will discuss both the issues in the forth coming paragraphs with reasons supported by
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some
examples and at last will be giving a concrete conclusion.

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opine this
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because
, by this a
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number
of spectators will be coming all around the globe. The
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government
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has to
spend
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a lot of
money in the facilities including
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accomodation
, food and
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many
more others. Apart from this the cost of
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organising
the
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event
and managing the expenses will
gradually
decrease the economy.

On the other hand
, the positives can be, the
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government
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has to
spend
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only
once after that the fares of the
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event
will
totally
be
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added
in the economy.
Moreover
, it will boost up the construction of infrastructure which will facilitate the public
as well
.
Furthermore
, there will be a
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number
of job opportunities which increase and provide jobs to the unemployed
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people
.
In addition
to this
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some of the
native sports persons will
also
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get
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some
lime-light and can earn
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some
respect while competing in the games.

To recapitulate,
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some
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people
take it as
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positive
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some
take it as
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negative
,
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but
in my opinion it is a plus point for every country which is making efforts in
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organising
these global competitions.
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Because
by this a
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number
of peasants can
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get
a living by earning jobs which
are provided
during the whole process of
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organising
the
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event
as well
as
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keep
the
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event
going with no problems in between.

IELTS essay Many nations, nowadays, are competing for right to host international sporting events. however, some people think it is not a good idea.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
5.0
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