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Many museum across the world an entry fee from all visitors, some people argue that entry to the museums should be free. How far do you agree or disagree with this argument?

Many museum across the world an entry fee from all visitors, some people argue that entry to the museums should be free. How far with this argument? a9RY
Museums are the place of ancient aesthetic and antiques. Many people assert that entry ticket to all the museums around the globe should be kept free. However, I contrast this belief, as certain amount of charge is pivotal for all the visitors due to various reasons which I shall discuss further in this essay. Minimal amount of entry charges is required because of numerous solid reasons. Firstly, if free entry is given to all the visitors than the artefacts and ancient statues losses its importance and people considered them as granted. Secondly, such artefacts and articles are vulnerable, chances of spoilt increases by the vagabonds if no charges is taken from them. For example, articles in the museums can be damage or spoil by the indecent person because he considered them as debris of past. In addition, some museums depend upon fares for its maintenance as government allots limited amount of funds to this museums. However, some short-sighted people considered that museums should provide them free entry. To begin with, they considered that museums displays culture and historical value of their country, so every citizens has a rights to see those valuables. Moreover, ancient articles are public property and thus they should be freely accessible to all natives. Furthermore, some people argue that it is unsound to levy heavy charges on the visitors for the purpose of its expansion or maintenance. In conclusion, despite some of its attractive benefits, it is not feasible for the authorities to make the free entry for all the visitors, so I whole-heartedly believe that at least nominal charges should be impose on the tickets.
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are the place of ancient aesthetic and antiques.
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assert that
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entry
ticket to all the
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museums
around the globe should be
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kept
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free
.
However
, I contrast this belief, as certain amount of
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charge
is pivotal for all the
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visitors
due to various reasons which I shall discuss
further
in this essay.

Minimal amount of
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entry
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charges
is required
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because
of numerous solid reasons.
Firstly
, if
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free
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entry
is
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given
to all the
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visitors
than the
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artefacts
and ancient statues losses its importance and
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people
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considered
them as granted.
Secondly
, such
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artefacts
and articles are vulnerable, chances of
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spoilt
increases by the vagabonds if no
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charges
is taken
from them.
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, articles in the
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museums
can be damage or spoil by the indecent person
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he
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considered
them as debris of past.
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,
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museums
depend upon fares for its maintenance as
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government
allots limited amount of funds to
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museums.

However
,
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some
short-sighted
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people
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considered
that
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museums
should provide them
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free
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entry
. To
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with, they
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considered
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museums
displays culture and historical value of their country,
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every
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to
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those valuables.
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, ancient articles are public property and
thus
they should be
freely
accessible to all natives.
Furthermore
,
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some
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people
argue that it is unsound to levy heavy
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charges
on the
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visitors
for the purpose of its expansion or maintenance.

In conclusion
, despite
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some
of its attractive benefits, it is not feasible for the authorities to
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make
the
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free
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entry
for all the
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visitors
,
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so
I whole-
heartedly
believe that at least nominal
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charges
should be
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impose
on the tickets.
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IELTS essay Many museum across the world an entry fee from all visitors, some people argue that entry to the museums should be free. How far with this argument?

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