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Computer games are very popular for all ages and nationalities. Parents think this has little educational value and it will be harmful for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Computer games are very popular for all ages and nationalities. Parents think this has little educational value and it will be harmful for children. 2OQ6
Internet games are extremely famous for all age categories and nationalities. Caretakers of the children argue that online games are adverse to children and gain only a few academic benefits. I completely agree with this statement and let's discuss a number of its viewpoints with examples. On the one hand, nowadays, all people, especially, students are addicted to online games and lost their parent's money by playing payable internet games. Additionally, juniors pay full attention to computers. Consequently, the academic performance of the graduates becomes poor. A number of players are also faced with a few psychological problems like addictions, insomnia, and poor memory and intelligence. For instance, A study was conducted in the USA in 2018 regarding the adverse effects of online games. As a result, 90% of boys were affected by online games rather than girls. On the other hand, A few games like online chess, carrom board, and numerical games help to improve their IQ level and concentration. Apart from this, most children often addicted to video games like PUBG, free fire, and other video games. Subsequently, online game benefits outweigh its adverse effects. For example, globally, 86% of children and young adults are love to play video games other than other games. In conclusion, internet games have both merits and demerits. Although, its demerits outweigh its merits. In my opinion, parents should restrict their children from playing online games and motivate them to concentrate on their academics.
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for all age categories and nationalities. Caretakers of the
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argue that
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online
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are adverse to
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and gain
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only
a few academic benefits. I completely
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agree
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let
's discuss a number of its viewpoints with examples. On the one hand, nowadays, all
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people
,
especially
, students
are addicted
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online
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games
and lost their parent's money by playing payable internet
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games
.
Additionally
, juniors pay full attention to computers.
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, the academic performance of the graduates becomes poor. A number of players are
also
faced with a few psychological problems like addictions, insomnia, and poor memory and intelligence.
For instance
, A study
was conducted
in the USA in 2018 regarding the adverse effects of
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online
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games
.
As a result
, 90% of boys were
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affected
by
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online
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games
rather
than girls. On the
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other
hand, A few
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like
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online
chess,
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their IQ level and concentration. Apart from this, most
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often
addicted to video
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like PUBG, free fire, and
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video
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games
.
Subsequently
,
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game benefits outweigh its adverse effects.
For example
, globally, 86% of
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children
and young adults are
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love
to play video
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games
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than
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.
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, internet
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have both merits and demerits.
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Although
, its demerits outweigh its merits. In my opinion, parents should restrict their
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children
from playing
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online
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and motivate them to concentrate on their academics.
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IELTS essay Computer games are very popular for all ages and nationalities. Parents think this has little educational value and it will be harmful for children.

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