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Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development, because this land would be better used for housing.

Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development, because this land would be better used for housing. MQxp
Urban migrationis causing extreme pressure on housing and infrastructureand, consequently, some people feel that public parks have become a luxury that we can no longer afford. While it is true that green areascan take up a lot of space, the benefits to the residents of a city and to the environment are too numerousto ignore. It is undeniable that parks provide valuable leisure amenities –a place to picnic, walk, kick a ball, play with the children, or just relax. Besides this, recent research has shown that they also provide appreciable health benefits by allowing people to engage with nature, which enhances their mental well-being and lowers their stress levels. Consider also that, with the rising epidemic of obesity, it is more important than ever to make space available for physical exercise. The bonus of exercising in a natural setting, rather than going to a gym or jogging on urban streets, is that not only does the body benefit from the physical activity but anxiety and depression are alleviated as well. It is reported that the overall effect of “green exercise” is betterfitness, lower blood pressure, lower cholesterol levels and greater tranquillity. Moreover, for lower socio-economic groups, parks are an affordable way to improve health and participate in social interaction. City planners should also consider environmental benefits before deciding to sacrificeparklandfor construction. Trees improve air quality by removing pollutants and filtering the air. Furthermore, if parks are located alongside urban waterways, they help keep the water clean by absorbing contaminated runoff from the city’s hard surfaces. In conclusion, although I appreciate the problem, I wholeheartedly disagree with the view that parks should be used to mitigate housing shortages in cities. They offer significant health and recreation benefits to the people and improve the overall climate and environment of the city. If space is truly at a premium, cityofficials would do better to look at reducing the urban sprawl of shopping malls and parking lots.
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people
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parks
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ignore
. It is undeniable that
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parks
provide valuable leisure amenities –a place to picnic, walk, kick a ball, play with the children, or
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just
relax.
Besides
this, recent research has shown that they
also
provide appreciable health
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benefits
by allowing
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people
to engage with nature, which enhances their mental well-being and lowers their
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stress
levels. Consider
also
that, with the rising epidemic of obesity, it is more
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important
than ever to
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make
space available for physical exercise. The bonus of exercising in a natural setting,
rather
than going to a gym or jogging on
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urban
streets, is that not
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only
does the body
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benefit
from the physical activity
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anxiety and depression
are alleviated
as well
. It
is reported
that the
overall
effect of “green exercise” is
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betterfitness
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tranquillity
.
Moreover
, for lower
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socio-economic
groups,
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parks
are an affordable way to
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improve
health and participate in social interaction. City planners should
also
consider environmental
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benefits
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before
deciding to
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sacrificeparklandfor
construction. Trees
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improve
air quality by removing pollutants and filtering the air.
Furthermore
, if
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parks
are located
alongside
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urban
waterways, they
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help
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keep
the water clean by absorbing contaminated runoff from the city’s
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hard
surfaces.
In conclusion
, although I appreciate the problem, I
wholeheartedly
disagree with the view that
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parks
should be
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used
to mitigate housing shortages in
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cities
. They offer significant health and recreation
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benefits
to the
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people
and
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improve
the
overall
climate and environment of the city. If space is
truly
at a premium,
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cityofficials
would do better to look at reducing the
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urban
sprawl of shopping malls and parking lots.

IELTS essay Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development, because this land would be better used for housing.

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