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Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development because this land would be better used for housing. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development because this land would be better used for housing. v. 1
Fees for higher education are expensive and not affordable for everyone. According to some, university should be free for all people regardless of their background. In my opinion, offering everyone free university education would be problematic and, therefore, should only be offered to certain individuals. Having a free university educationuniversity education for everyone would put a tremendous financial strain on the country. Universities would have no income from fees and, consequently, they would rely on state for funding. Doing this means taking funds from other much needed areas such as, the health care system, in order to allocate money to universities. For the majority of countries, particularly, developing and under developed countries, this would not a financially viable option. Another point to consider is that offering all people free tertiary education would tempt many people to enter educational institution, whether, they are interested or not. In other words, rather than choosing to get a job, some young people opt do get a degree to which they would only half-heartedly apply themselves. This would not only be a waste of the country’s finance, but also a waste of human resources. Finally, the best solution would be to keep academy fees, but still offer some places to gifted students from poor background. This would ensure that talented, intelligent students who cannot afford to pay for higher education would still get educated on the train. As a result, society would benefit by getting the right people trained and valuable resources would not be wasted. In conclusion, abolishing academy fees is not feasible for most countries, but offering free places to particular students who have limited financial means is a much better use of the country’s resources.
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for higher
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education
are expensive and not affordable for everyone. According to
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some
,
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university
should be
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free
for all
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people
regardless of their background. In my opinion, offering everyone
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free
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university
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education
would be problematic and,
therefore
, should
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only
be offered
to certain individuals.

Having a
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free
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university
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educationuniversity
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education
for everyone would put a tremendous financial strain on the
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country
.
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Universities
would have no income from
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fees
and,
consequently
, they would rely on state for funding. Doing this means taking funds from other
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much needed
areas such as, the health care system, in order to allocate money to
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universities
. For the majority of
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countries
,
particularly
, developing and under developed
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countries
, this would not a
financially
viable option.

Another point to consider is that offering all
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people
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free
tertiary
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education
would tempt
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many
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people
to enter educational institution, whether, they
are interested
or not.
In other words
,
rather
than choosing to
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get
a job,
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some
young
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people
opt do
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get
a degree to which they would
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only
half-
heartedly
apply themselves. This would not
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only
be a waste of the
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country’s
finance,
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but
also
a waste of human resources.

Finally
, the best solution would be to
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keep
academy
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fees
,
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but
still
offer
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some
places to gifted students from poor background. This would ensure that talented, intelligent students who cannot afford to pay for higher
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education
would
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
educated on the train.
As a result
, society would benefit by getting the right
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people
trained and valuable resources would not
be wasted
.

In conclusion
, abolishing academy
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fees
is not feasible for most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
offering
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free
places to particular students who have limited financial means is a much better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country’s
resources.
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IELTS essay Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development because this land would be better used for housing. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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