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Many governments think that economic development in important goal. Others think that other aspects are equally important for the development of country. discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Many governments think that economic development in important goal. Others think that other aspects are equally important for the development of country. v. 1
Tourism has grown rapidly in many parts of the world and has become a reasonable source of income for the government and residents of a certain country. It can be said that this industry has been improved, not only in developing countries, but also in poorer nations. As such, it is a positive development because people get to discover new places and adventures, however, they should still consider how these improvements are affecting our environment. Since tourism has started to expand, there have been many plans and budgets that the government has allocated for it to continue to prosper. This has led to the improvements in areas that were once impossible to travel to, which resulted in a number or tourist destinations, each having a unique theme. In connection to this is a huge rise in a country's economy, together with the local residents, who have found an additional work through tourism. Some examples of these are serving as a tour guide, selling native delicacies, making personalized souvenirs, and offering houses for transients. Although there has been many competitions between locals in terms of costumers, it is still compensated with the number of tourists that come and go. On the downside, these developments have also caused significant negative impacts on nature. These include the destruction and disturbance of the natural habitat of animals and the extreme amount of garbages left by the visitors. While it is a benefit to most, the authorities should take note that being responsible is a part of tourism. There should be proper implementations of policies such as limitations on how far a tourist may perform specific activities and strict rules on littering. To sum it all up, the improvement of tourism serves mainly as an economic resource, but it should be taken into consideration the possible damages it can cause to nature.
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has grown
rapidly
in
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many
parts of the world and has become a reasonable source of income for the
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government
and residents of a certain country. It can
be said
that this industry has been
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improved
, not
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only
in
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developing countries
,
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but
also
in poorer nations. As such, it is a
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positive
development
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because
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people
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get
to discover new places and adventures,
however
, they should
still
consider how these improvements are affecting our environment.

Since
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tourism
has
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started
to expand, there have been
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many
plans and budgets that the
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government
has allocated for it to continue to prosper. This has led to the improvements in areas that were once impossible to travel to, which resulted in a number or tourist destinations, each having a unique theme.

In connection to this is a huge rise in a country's economy, together with the local residents, who have found an additional work through
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tourism
.
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Some
examples of these are serving as a tour guide, selling native delicacies, making personalized souvenirs, and offering
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houses
for transients. Although there has been
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many
competitions between locals in terms of costumers, it is
still
compensated with the number of tourists that
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come
and go.

On the downside, these developments have
also
caused significant
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negative
impacts on nature. These include the destruction and disturbance of the natural habitat of animals and the extreme amount of
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garbages
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left
by the visitors. While it is a benefit to most, the authorities should take note that being responsible is a part of
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tourism
. There should be proper implementations of policies such as limitations on how far a tourist may perform specific activities and strict
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rules
on littering.

To sum it all up, the improvement of
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tourism
serves
mainly
as an economic resource,
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but
it should
be taken
into consideration the possible damages it can cause to nature.
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic development in important goal. Others think that other aspects are equally important for the development of country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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