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Many governments spend millions of dollars in space exploration and research, as they feel it is an important investment; however, many citizens feel that it is a waste of money. Discuss both these opinions and include your own.

Many governments spend millions of dollars in space exploration and research, as they feel it is an important investment; however, many citizens feel that it is a waste of money. wa32d
Space exploration has become more widespread since the first satellite was sent up to our orbit. This leads to a public controversy that people started to question about whether or not governments should spend lots of money into these projects. In my opinion, I firmly believe that there are more visible issues on Earth waiting to be funded rather than planets waiting to be found. To begin with, it is undeniable that humans should learn more about the universe in which we are a part of. This may bring us to a possibility of finding an inhabitable planet for human to settle since population growth has been crunching the natural resources now. Due to this fact, scientists need to conduct more space research which require a lot of support from government, which also means that money is crucial to accomplish the task. On the contrary, even scientists have not even got any clues about how possible they could finally reach a dream planet, but coincidentally natural disasters and pollution are awaiting to be tackled. To put it further, there are millions of people who do not have access to fresh water and food every day, but with a small amount of money that put into those space programs would save millions of lives. An illustration for this point is African people who are suffered from starvation and poor living conditions, and people would feel more pleasant and acceptable to donate and save these people than finding a planet with a mere possibility. In conclusion, I understand that space programs somewhat play a relatively important role in our modern world, but I think it would be better if the money are spent on more pressing issues nowadays.
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Space
exploration has become more widespread since the
first
satellite was
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sent
up to our orbit. This leads to a public controversy that
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people
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started
to question about
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
whether or not
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governments
should spend lots of
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money
into these projects. In my opinion, I
firmly
believe that there are more visible issues on Earth waiting to
be funded
rather
than
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planets
waiting to
be found
.

To
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begin
with, it is undeniable that humans should learn more about the universe in which we are a part of. This may bring us to a possibility of finding an inhabitable
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planet
for human to settle since population growth has been crunching the natural resources
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now
. Due to this fact, scientists need to conduct more
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space
research which require
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a lot of
support from
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government
, which
also
means that
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money
is crucial to accomplish the task.

On the contrary
, even scientists have not even
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got
any clues about how possible they could
finally
reach a dream
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planet
,
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but
coincidentally
natural disasters and pollution are awaiting to
be tackled
. To put it
further
, there are millions of
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people
who do not have access to fresh water and food every day,
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but
with a
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small
amount of
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money
that put into those
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space
programs would save millions of
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lives
. An illustration for this point is African
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people
who
are suffered
from starvation and poor living conditions, and
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people
would feel more pleasant and acceptable to donate and save these
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people
than finding a
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planet
with a mere possibility.

In conclusion
, I understand that
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space
programs somewhat play a
relatively
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important
role in our modern world,
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but
I
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think
it would be better if the
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money
are spent
on more pressing issues nowadays.
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IELTS essay Many governments spend millions of dollars in space exploration and research, as they feel it is an important investment; however, many citizens feel that it is a waste of money.

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