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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages. v.9

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages. v. 9
Food shipping has been capturing significant public attention in recent decades, raising questions of environmental and economical implications. Despite the disadvantages of local food consumption could be pronounced, they are still outweighed by the advantages. On the one hand, there are many benefits when it comes to the usage of local food. From the environmental perspective, local food consumption is invariably associated with the reduced automobile dependency for the importation and transportation of foreign food. Without the heavy flow of traffic for food shipping, the carbon dioxide concentrations in the atmosphere could be minimized, ensuring the environmental sustainability. From the economical perspective, since local food producers would not have to incur the expenses of logistics related to cross-nation shipping fees or customs charges in the case of imported products, which are proved to be prohibitively expensive, the local food costs are relatively low. Consequently, low prices would fall into the affordability of many individuals irrespective of their purchasing powers, guaranteeing food securities on a massive scale. On the other hand, local food consumption could be fraught with many pitfalls. First, in fact many nations and regions are still grappling with civil warfare stemming from political turmoils and ethnic division. This means that constant fightings and bombings suggest causal relationship with the destruction of local crops, which could not ensure the stable local food supply, making citizens resort to foreign food shipping. In addition, due to the peculiar characteristics of soil in different local areas, only specific food could strive containing specific types of nutrition. In order to ensure the adequate amount of nutrition, people have to search for food supply from other regions, leading to various food options and ample nutrition intake in consumers. In conclusion, local food consumption could offer many environmental and economical benefits despite the controversy of unstable food supply. However, with better governmental administration and genetic modification of local food, these problems could easily be addressed.
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environmental
and economical implications. Despite the disadvantages of
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local
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food
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consumption
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, they are
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benefits when it
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to the usage of
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. From the
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perspective,
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is
invariably
associated with the
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reduced
automobile dependency for the importation and transportation of foreign
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food
. Without the heavy flow of traffic for
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food
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shipping
, the carbon dioxide concentrations in the atmosphere could
be minimized
, ensuring the
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environmental
sustainability. From the economical perspective, since
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local
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food
producers would not
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have to
incur the expenses of logistics related to cross-nation
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shipping
fees or customs charges in the case of imported products, which
are proved
to be
prohibitively
expensive, the
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local
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costs are
relatively
low.
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individuals irrespective of their purchasing powers, guaranteeing
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securities on a massive scale.

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,
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consumption
could be fraught with
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pitfalls.
First
, in fact
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nations and regions are
still
grappling with civil warfare stemming from political turmoils and ethnic division. This means that constant
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fightings
and bombings suggest causal relationship with the destruction of
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local
crops, which could not ensure the stable
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local
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food
supply, making citizens resort to foreign
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.
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, due to the peculiar characteristics of soil in
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different
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local
areas,
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only
specific
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could strive
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containing
specific types of nutrition. In order to ensure the adequate amount of nutrition,
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people
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search for
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supply from other regions, leading to various
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options and ample nutrition intake in consumers.

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conclusion,
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could offer
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environmental
and
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benefits despite the controversy of unstable
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supply.
However
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, these problems could
easily
be addressed
.
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41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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