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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v.1

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v. 1
Nowadays, lots of food is shipped from distance places instead to buy from local businesses are commonly discussed topic. Some people assert that is about the variety and price of products, whilst others rather to buy local products, helping local business and also find more quality of products. There are both advantages and disadvantages in which case, some of which this essay shall consider. The first point to contemplate is regarding the fact that sometimes the price is much cheaper when brought in high quantities also bigger markets can offer more options to the customers. However, some people prefer consuming products from local business or local farmers, those products supposed to be healthier and no preservatives, besides helping the community they are preserving their health as well. Furthermore, the local business has no condition to expand without the help of local communities. Another factor to be considered is the exploration of the big companies which the local business, most of the time the small business has no profits when they supply big markets. The put the price down to win the competition. On the other hand, the opponents of the above idea have some objections that cannot be ignored, in some cities the council organise some street food markets to support the local producers also connecting the local community with local business. Therefore, is really necessary to have the interlink among government, local business, community to get strength local transitions. Considering the point discussed previously, it is clear to state that the problem could be solved by government incentives to support local business to supply local community and encourage them to consume food from local markets.
Nowadays, lots of food
is shipped
from distance places
instead
to
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buy
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local
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businesses
are
commonly
discussed topic.
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people
assert
that is
about the variety and price of
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products
, whilst others
rather
to
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buy
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local
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products
, helping
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local
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business
and
also
find more quality of
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products
. There are both advantages and disadvantages in which case,
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some
of which this essay shall consider.

The
first
point to contemplate is regarding the fact that
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sometimes
the price is much cheaper when brought in high quantities
also
bigger markets can offer more options to the customers.
However
,
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some
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people
prefer consuming
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products
from
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local
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business
or
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local
farmers, those
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products
supposed to be healthier and no preservatives,
besides
helping the
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community
they are preserving their health
as well
.
Furthermore
, the
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local
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business
has no condition to expand without the
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help
of
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local
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communities
. Another factor to
be considered
is the exploration of the
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big
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companies
which the
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local
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business
, most of the time the
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small
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business
has no profits when they supply
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big
markets. The put the price down to win the competition.

On the other hand
, the opponents of the above
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idea
have
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some
objections that cannot be
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ignored
, in
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some
cities the council
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organise
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some
street food markets to support the
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local
producers
also
connecting the
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local
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community
with
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local
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business
.
Therefore
, is
really
necessary to have
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the interlink
among
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government
,
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local
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business
,
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community
to
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get
strength
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local
transitions.

Considering the point discussed previously, it is
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clear
to state that the problem could
be solved
by
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government
incentives to support
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local
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business
to supply
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local
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community
and encourage them to consume food from
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local
markets.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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