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Heroes comes in many forms, for your activity you will need to research and write about a hero.

Heroes comes in many forms, for your activity you will need to research and write about a hero. 3a0pN
It is undeniable that nowadays, there are many types of heroes that are coming into our spiritual anchor forms in a lot of aspects of the beliefs or even the cultures which are derived from our parents and the society. From my point of view, my mother is the best and foremost heroes that I have ever found in all across the globe, described in the following paragraphs. To begin with, every single mom in this world knows what actions can cause the best effect on their children, even my mom. She is the one who teaches me how to improve myself in many perspectives such as school preparation and social skills. In other words, I can prepare myself to be a better person by a lot of her suggestions. Moreover, she even aids me with many problems that I got from a bad society. For example, If I got bullied by someone, she will not allow them to do that with me again by teaching me the lessons about how I should react with them to protect myself from those kinds of people. However, she is overprotective sometimes with me, she often calls to their parents or the professors in the school to inform the incidents if something happens to me accidentally or wittingly by someone in the school. Additionally, it can be seen that my mother has a lot of qualities, which are mentioned in the lesson. For example, she is honest, she always tells me the truth and everything that can help me to be successful in the future. Besides, she is a selfless person. I could say that she provides me a lot of comfort and essential things in my life such as high-technology devices and money that I can spend on the food in my school when there is a mealtime at noon. Nevertheless, the fact that every parent in this world plays a major role in spoiling their children, but in that case, I think that it depends on the surroundings or the family of their children. In other words, my mom will give me the present of gift after only I achieve my goals, which means she does not spoil me with her money. In conclusion, my mom is one of the kindest people on this earth, as I can see from all the things and personalities that she does, and I am sure that a lot of people think the same as me about mom, every mom cares their children without the hesitation.
It is undeniable that nowadays, there are
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many
types of heroes that are coming into our spiritual anchor forms in a
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lot
of aspects of the beliefs or even the cultures which
are derived
from our parents and the society. From my point of view, my mother is the best and foremost heroes that I have ever found in all across the globe,
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described
in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, every single
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mom
in this world knows what actions can cause the best effect on their
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children
, even my
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mom
. She is the one who teaches me how to
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improve
myself in
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many
perspectives such as school preparation and social
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skills
.
In other words
, I can prepare myself to be a better person by a
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lot
of her suggestions.
Moreover
, she even aids me with
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many
problems that I
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got
from a
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bad
society.
For example
, If I
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got
bullied by someone, she will not
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allow
them to do that with me again by teaching me the lessons about how I should react with them to protect myself from those kinds of
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people
.
However
, she is overprotective
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sometimes
with me, she
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often
calls to their parents or the professors in the school to inform the incidents if something happens to me
accidentally
or
wittingly
by someone in the school.

Additionally
, it can be
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seen
that my mother has a
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lot
of qualities, which
are mentioned
in the lesson.
For example
, she is honest, she always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tells
me the truth and everything that can
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help
me to be successful in the future.
Besides
, she is a selfless person. I could say that she provides me a
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lot
of comfort and essential things in my life such as high-technology devices and money that I can spend on the food in my school when there is a mealtime at noon.
Nevertheless
, the fact that every parent in this world plays a major role in spoiling their
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children
,
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but
in that case
, I
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think
that it depends on the surroundings or the family of their
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children
.
In other words
, my
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mom
will give me the present of gift after
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only
I achieve my goals, which means she does not spoil me with her money.

In conclusion
, my
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mom
is one of the kindest
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people
on this earth, as I can
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see
from all the things and personalities that she does, and I am sure that a
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lot
of
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people
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think
the same as me about
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mom
, every
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mom
cares their
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children
without the hesitation.
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IELTS essay Heroes comes in many forms, for your activity you will need to research and write about a hero.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
421 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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