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Many doctors say that people in the modern world do not exercise enough. What are the causes for this? What are the solutions for this problem?

Many doctors say that people in the modern world do not exercise enough. What are the causes for this? What are the solutions for this problem? NM9Oj
since time immemorial man has been placing a premium on health. most doctors opine that there was a time when health was not a worrisome issue but not due to modern lifestyle it has become an uphill task for people to do exercise and live a healthy life. below is an outline of the cause followed by suggestions it is amply clear that there are scores of causes behind this situation. in the first place, sedentary lifestyles are an abode of all the lifestyles, in this day and age modern man remains busy as a bee to become a successful person whereas commitment and dedication towards works as well as an acute paucity of time which do not allow to do physical exercise. moreover, due to the advancement of modern technology, most people glue to modern machines and don't engross themselves in a fitness regime. According to survey. COnducted by united nation of census bureau in New York Us on group of 500 employee who were working in reputated companies such as orcale microsoft on the age range of 30-45 stated that 85% of them concured that Sedentary lifestyle had kept them away from participate in physical exercise given that the problem is grave and it is imperative to look for suggestions. This grim problem can be resolved with various initiatives, undoubtedly long working hours in companies must mitigate to ensure some spare time for the employees so that they could indulge themselves in physical exercises. apart from this, it is the bound duty of the government should organize health camps to aware people about the health and repercussions of modern machines which develop a lackadaisical attitude in them. truth be told, the government should impose stringent laws in offices that help to ruin the situation due to overtime and allow people to lead a unbalance life. Most of the multi national companies such as google infoys had introduced gym facilities in their organisation in order to motivate there employees to indulge in the physical exercise so that they can take care of their employees health To encapsulate, It can be concluded that, as the world is getting more into technology, people are adapting effortless technique so they do not need any physical hustle. People are preferring sedentary lifestyle because of the latest invention and that is making people idle by not doing any excercise. Working organization, schools, government should promote some method by health awareness events so that people realize the seriousness of excerises
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since
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immemorial
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man
has been placing a premium on
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health
.
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most
doctors opine that there was a
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when
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health
was not a worrisome issue
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not due to
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modern
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lifestyle
it has become an uphill task for
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people
to do
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exercise
and
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live
a healthy life.
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below
is an outline of the cause followed by
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suggestions


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it
is
amply
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clear
that there are scores of causes behind this situation.
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in
the
first
place, sedentary
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lifestyles
are an abode of all the
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lifestyles
, in this day and age
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modern
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man
remains busy as a bee to become a successful person whereas commitment and dedication towards works
as well
as an acute paucity of
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time
which do not
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allow
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to do
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physical
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exercise
.
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moreover
, due to the advancement of
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modern
technology, most
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people
glue to
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modern
machines and don't engross themselves in a fitness regime. According to survey.
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COnducted
by united nation of census bureau in New York Us on group of 500
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employee
who were working in
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companies
such as
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orcale
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microsoft
on the age range of 30-45 stated that 85% of them
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concured
that Sedentary
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lifestyle
had
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kept
them away from participate in
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physical
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exercise


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given
that the problem is grave and it is imperative to look for suggestions. This grim problem can
be resolved
with various initiatives,
undoubtedly
long working hours in
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companies
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must
mitigate to ensure
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some
spare
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time
for the
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employees
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so
that they could indulge themselves in
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physical
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exercises
.
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apart
from this, it is the bound duty of the
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government
should organize
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health
camps to aware
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people
about the
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health
and repercussions of
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modern
machines which develop a lackadaisical attitude in them.
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truth
be
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told
, the
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government
should impose stringent laws in offices that
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help
to ruin the situation due to overtime and
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allow
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people
to lead
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a
unbalance life. Most of the
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multi national
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companies
such as google
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infoys
had introduced gym facilities in their
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organisation
in order to motivate there
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employees
to indulge in the
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physical
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exercise
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so
that they can take care of their
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employees
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health


To encapsulate, It can
be concluded
that, as the world is getting more into technology,
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people
are adapting effortless technique
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so
they do not need any
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physical
hustle.
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People
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are preferring
sedentary
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lifestyle
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because
of the latest invention and
that is
making
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people
idle by not doing any
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excercise
. Working
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organization
, schools,
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government
should promote
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some
method by
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health
awareness
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events
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so
that
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people
realize the seriousness of
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excerises
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IELTS essay Many doctors say that people in the modern world do not exercise enough. What are the causes for this? What are the solutions for this problem?

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