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Many developing countries require aid from international organisations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many developing countries require aid from international organisations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. Qgw3
People have different views about the kind of support that wealthy nations should provide for poorer ones. Although some say that non-financial support is beneficial for poor countries, my own view is that international aid should be in the form of financial assistance. There are several reasons to believe that practical assistance and advice are what developing countries need. Firstly, an effective education system is a key factor in the growth of a country, so advice on how to build such a system should be given to less wealthy countries. For example, since the [your country name] school curriculum focuses heavily on theories, students cannot apply what they learn into practice and come up with creative ideas, which is why the country fails to make technological and economic progress. Advice and instructions from developed countries are therefore expected to help [your country name] improve their education system. Secondly, foreign assistance can also be given in terms of providing human resources. By having an additional number of well-educated and knowledgeable individuals work in their nations, hopefully less developed countries can escape from poverty. However, I believe that financial support would be more useful for poorer nations. One argument is that even valuable ideas for education reform may be irrelevant if a country is financially disadvantaged. In the aforementioned example about [your country name], while it seems beneficial to re-organise the education system, this cannot happen in the short run because there are a variety of costs associated with education reform, such as purchasing learning tools and training teachers. Furthermore, financial resources provided by rich countries may help poorer ones invest in medical and scientific research. If a sufficient amount of money is spent on these areas, technological advances are significantly more likely to be made, and such innovations can help improve the economic growth of a nation. In conclusion, while some people argue that foreign aid given to poor countries should be non-financial, it seems to me that it is financial support that helps these nations escape from poverty.
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view is that international aid should be in the form of
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assistance.

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countries
need.
Firstly
, an effective
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education
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system
is a key factor in the growth of a
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country
,
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advice on how to build such a
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should be
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given
to less wealthy
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countries
.
For example
, since the [your
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name] school curriculum focuses
heavily
on theories, students cannot apply what they learn into practice and
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up with creative
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ideas
, which is why the
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country
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technological and economic progress. Advice and instructions from developed
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.
Secondly
, foreign assistance can
also
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given
in terms of providing human resources. By having an additional number of well-educated and knowledgeable individuals work in their
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nations
,
hopefully
less developed
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countries
can escape from poverty.

However
, I believe that
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financial
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support
would be more useful for poorer
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nations
. One argument is that even valuable
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ideas
for
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education
reform may be irrelevant if a
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country
is
financially
disadvantaged. In the aforementioned example about [your
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country
name], while it seems beneficial to
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the
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education
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, this cannot happen in the short run
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because
there are a variety of costs associated with
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education
reform, such as purchasing learning tools and training teachers.
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financial
resources provided by rich
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countries
may
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help
poorer
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invest in medical and scientific research. If a sufficient amount of money
is spent
on these areas, technological advances are
significantly
more likely to
be made
, and such innovations can
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help
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improve
the economic growth of a nation.

In conclusion
, while
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people
argue that foreign aid
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given
to poor
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countries
should be non-financial, it seems to me that it is
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financial
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support
that
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helps
these
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nations
escape from poverty.
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IELTS essay Many developing countries require aid from international organisations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful.

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